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| Deep |
Posted
on 02-May-03 08:49 AM
It was 9:35 AM. Bale was walking as fast as he could. He was heading his school. Bale is from Baluwatar, by the way. Kina yasto chaskya ni ma#$%^ bhudi, Bale asked the question to the air then replied himself mu** bhat khana saath hinyo ki yasto hunch---on top of that hijo ko puja ko prasad re bhanera aama le feri raato rang jata tatai lagya kera dira Bale lai hinne belama. "Tyasto rang lagya kera khanna ma" Bale responded looking at the banana. Mom said "kehi hunna&yo bahira lagya ta ho ni---then she peeled the banana off--"laa" she said. "Dhila bhaisakyo--" Bale le bhutbhutaudai kera khayo then picked up his school bag, put his recently "half" halya shoes on and jhola chhadke parera bhirera chok bata hinna thikka parya thyo chok ma baasko kaiyo le pataliyeko kapal bata leekha jharna byasta hajurama said--"tero khutta bango ho ki ta bango tekne ho ki ke ho babu&jutta ko heel ta ekatira mattai khiyechha ni--" Bale got a bit irritated--looked at the heels then didn't know what to say to hajurmuwa but he said "hunchha khutta bango kam napara---kehi jannu sannu chhaina---". "Tai ladlas bhanera bhanya ni---achel ma budi le kehi bolnu hunna---na riketas siketas lagya ho--"hajurmuwa fatfataudai thiyin Bale hinyo. Bahir bata ma hindai he once again looked at his shoes and thought "sachchi yo mu** heel kina euta euta chheu mattai khiyeko hola---bich ma nakhiyiera---dubai khutta ko daine tita mattai heel dherai khiyiyeko rechhaek sur ma jutta herdai bichargardai hinirako Bale "My shelter" lekhya dhoka ma aaipugya thyo saato line garera bhitrako kukkur bhukyo. Aattera Bale chit chhito hinne bhako khutta farkiyera bhwakkai ladyo..tempo chadera hineka duiti taruni le ni dekhe---Bale lai kya bore bho---tu uthera Bale ali ali khochaudai fata fat hinyo Italian embassy (paila thyo tya) tira---pailei daine modiyera tyo bato lagnu parne ma ali kati agadi puge chha Bale jutta ko surma . "yo ma*&^% kukkur lai ta nagar panchyat le bis khwaunu napugya---ahile ta nagarpalika bho kyare ma#$%^" ali par tirai pugera bhani Bale le ris pokhyo.
When he reached the intersection where another galli from Bhatbhateni and backside of Baluwatar met the blacktop road he was following-just by the University of Colorado at Denver Buliding, he thought should I take "Neel sarsoti ko galli or go through Gairidhara?" Of course, Neel sarsoti galli was shorter to the school but the reason for going through Gairidhara was to catch that Bank's staff bus. Pet asadhhe ghochi rakohenna pani garho bhaira bhera Bale decided to go through Gairidhara and take a chance with that staff bus. "tyo mu** bange khalasi paryo bhane ta jhundina didaina tai pani heram" Bale thought. When he got to Gairidhara it was already 9:50. "la ma#$%^ bus gaisakyo jasto chha&aba aaja Bhakte le jatra garne bho mero" Bale bhutbhutayo. Bhakta sir almost always used to stand by the entrance after 10 to see who comes late. Late-comers lai Bhakta sir le nana thari le dukha dinthyo. Bale was already caught twice this month for late coming. He was already warned by Bhkata sir.
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| Deep |
Posted
on 02-May-03 08:49 AM
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Bale was standing disappointed bhudi samatera right at that gairidhara intersection-Tangal ganesthan to the east, chardhunge naxal to the south, lainchowr via tukucha to the west and baluwatar to the north. Then smile landed on his lips as he saw the bus heading toward him with kalo muslo dhwa. "aayo aayo la ma#$%^ jhannai ma ta---"Bale ran to grab the doorhe didn't know and didn't care if Bange is the khalasi today. He heard someone yellingyeyebut he grabbed the railing by the door any way.
He got off by his school from the bus and ran toward the entrancechadke parera bokeko heavy bag was banging his waist and downbhyat bhyat bhyat. Bale entered. Nirmala miss was standing with smile by the door. Sriman gambhir gaaune bela bhaisakya thyo. "ek din yo nirmala miss lai phool dina parne" Bale thought. He was obsessed with that miss. "kya chwank miss yaar yo " swa swa gardai man ko laddu ghiu sanga khadai Bale proceeded after saying "good morning miss". On his way he thought "aaja bhakte kaha marechha?' then he saw Bhakta sir with wicked smile leaning against the paani tyanki. Man ta thiyena but still he said "good morning, sir".
Fas pired lagyo. Bale was in class IX "A". He was a patented "C" section student. This was the first ever year for Bale in section A. Section A was the most prestigious section for the class. The class first and other tops used to secure their seats in section A. Section A ma Bale pareko din ta he did not believe. He was sure that was an error. But since he was not notified otherwise, he went to the section A and to his surprise his name was called upon. From that day on he had asked many of his friends (most of them were in Cs and few in Bs) and others which section they're in. "mu** ho padhne bela ma guchcha khelera hinchhau ani kaha bata "A" ma nam aauchha" Bale had started to boast. In the classroom, Bale used to sit toward the last benches. The room had two entrances-in the front and in the back. Bale had chosen a seat by that rear entrance so he could watch anyone roaming around outside. He used to share the bench with 3 more students but none of them were his good friends and he didn't care.
Bairagi sir entered. Nepali ko class thyo. "Nepali pani padhchhan, yo ta yattikai aai halchhani"-Bale used to say and always stood by his conviction. Nepali ko sir lai dekhera Bale le jhatta Pooja lai samjhyo---uhi baluwatar kiali kaali kaali thibhabya ghar thyo---sathi haru bhanthetyasko bau Nepali aama Indian rey. "Bau nepali bhaye si nepali ni tyo" Bale declared. Bale Pooja bhanesi hurukka huni---. After school he always used to hang around Pooja's house. Tyatai bata kahile kahi tudal devi samma pughtyo tukuchako chheu chheu bata---tudal devi ma Pooja milai deu bhanthyo ani aauthyo feri farkera pooja ko darshan garna. Kahile bhettai pani halthyo darshan Poojakokahile thanda ram farkinthyo.
Sathiharule uslai Pooja sanga jodera jiskauda Bale used to float in the heaven. "Pooja Modern ma padhchhe" Bale le afaile afailai bhanyo. Hijo kausi bata Pooja le Bale lai herera muskai rey. Bale didn't see that but Anup, a friend of Bale, said that. "ta mu** uta sangeetaa ghar tira ni hernu tyasle talai herera ek muskan di ra bhanya" Anup said. Nischal and Rupesh both agreed "ho ma^&%$#". "Thukka" Bale regretted. Bale paid for the tea at that tea stall in Bishalnagar later for Pooja smiling at him, which he didn't see. Farkida saanjh saanjh parisakya thyo---Bale le jatti hereni dekhena Pooja lai. "Aaja schhol bata thadai khutta Pooja ka janchhu" Bale decided. He imagined Pooja smiling at him from her kausimay be she will throw me a love letter dhungama berera who knows---Bale pulakit bho---. Yattikai ma Bale thought he heard his name called kata kata. Bairagi sir Jangiyo-ye kan sundainas? Bairagi sir ta Bale lai ghuri ra rechha. Bale had no clue what was going on. "Sir" Bale spoke. "What did I ask you?" Bairagi sir roared. "Malai jh#$ thah --maile sunya bhe po---afu kya majale Pooja lai samjhira belan---" Bale man manai risayo. Class mates khas khus laughed. Bale was clueless. Bairagi sir repeated the question with a pinch, "tritiya bhibhakti" ko udaharan diyibaksinchha ki, Bal Krishna ji". "what the F*&^ is Bibhakti?" Bale thought "Ajha tirtiya bibhakti rey---?".
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| bhenda2 |
Posted
on 02-May-03 09:52 AM
very funny!! I used to hate Nepali class...
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| MunnaMobile |
Posted
on 02-May-03 10:08 AM
Deep bro....dont keep us hanging like Bale...
Again wonderfully written, M waiting for Bale'z n Pooja'z final episode...Chittooooooooooo!!!!!
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| jira |
Posted
on 02-May-03 10:34 AM
deepdai, balkisney ko bhundee chirikka garyo uso bhey..:-) la thik cha la...balkisney lai school jani belama dherrai nakha bhannu parney ni. ajhhai lekhna paru hapta ko 2/3 wata..tej raftaar jawose na..hamley ta kaileykai saath diney ta ho ni deep sir lai
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| oys_chill |
Posted
on 02-May-03 11:10 AM
Deep dai, sarhai majja ko cha!
yesto po ta nostalgia pani......places, schools, classes.....ma chai nepali kilas lai ekdam shradha garthen tara ;) ..lau aroo ni jawos! was very very very very ^100 refreshing!
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| sparsha |
Posted
on 02-May-03 01:36 PM
"Jhoor" !
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| lonely |
Posted
on 02-May-03 01:55 PM
it was good.
I reminded me of my Nepali class but i never used to dream in Nepali class. Studying in a boy's school tyo pani boarder, ka bata dekhna paunu ni Puja suja lai..you purpuro ma lekera aayeko bhaye po???
Well written keep it up..but a BIG BUT..can't you type in Nepali..that would be sun ma sughanda.....Nepali ma padnu ko majja nai aarkai chha kya...
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| deep |
Posted
on 03-May-03 03:09 PM
In the name of Bale, sathiharu, thanks!
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| nabin |
Posted
on 04-May-03 10:20 AM
Even thogh I am not Bale, this is my story. Whenever heavy rain fell, high standing water mixed with sewer and floating solid(?) waste used to dominate a part of Gahiridhara- and that used to disgust me so bad---tara ke garne---chhaldai chhaldai hinnu parthyo!
School days - pleasant memories. I miss those wonderful wonderful days.
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| khimu |
Posted
on 04-May-03 12:30 PM
that was so funny deep
lakhna pani lekhya ho deep le
real story jastai chha timrai ta bha haina deep
what the f*ck "Bibhakti"
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| deep |
Posted
on 05-May-03 06:03 AM
Khimu,
mero afanai estori haina yo. Yo ta baluwatar ko Bale ko estori ni. Maile mero bhanamla ani feri Bale le protest garyo bhane? Who knows may be Bale is also reading this story [may already have (?)].
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| Deep |
Posted
on 06-May-03 09:03 AM
maile nai tandya mastira ---lau ja ta! ek round aru jaos na!
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| Bhinaju |
Posted
on 06-May-03 06:25 PM
Maile ta Baale lai Bale bhanera padheko!
Ramro ta chhaindai chha, alikati chhoto ho ki k napugya ho yaspali?
Tritiya Bhibhaktiko????
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| gokul |
Posted
on 07-May-03 06:01 AM
Deep,
You have a talent for story telling. However, your deliberate and conspicuous use of m-words has lowered the standard of your stories (from Mainali to sadake kathakaar). While you may argue that it portrays the real-world, I still believe the value of your stories lies in describing everyday mundane events in rochak tarikale and not necessarily using alphabets that go beyond 26 letters of English language.
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| PREMpujari |
Posted
on 07-May-03 06:35 AM
Dayummm!! Jhanndai chutya!!!
Aaaaaaaaanch Deep bro. Laaaaaaaaast hasaayo!!!
>>"what the F*&^ is Bibhakti?" Bale thought "Ajha tirtiya bibhakti rey---?".
hehe... kyaa classic, Khutrukkai paaryo, hasaayera Deep bro le!!!
Tyo half haalya shoe ta malai ni yaad aayo yaar!! ehh.. kyaa kyaa samjhaucha bro le!!
Aru ni jaawosh!!!
:D
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| Deep |
Posted
on 07-May-03 12:55 PM
PP, yaaar Bale lai bibhakti le ruwayo ni. Bibhakti Kaarak sanga aauchha bhanda "Ke mu**kaarak?" bhanthyo. Kunni kaha chha Bale achel?
Gukul,
Thanks for saying I have a talent for story telling. "However, your deliberate and conspicuous use of m-words has lowered the standard of your stories (from Mainali to sadake kathakaar)." I understand your point. Please also consider this: Most of the stories or incident I write here are true ones or at least are based on true incidents. Now Bale used to use "M" word after every other word. I couldn't write about him without using "M" words. That would've been a great injustice to him and the truthfulness of the incident.
Mainali was a great writer. I stand nowhere near him. No one can replace Mainali for me. I am a staunch admirer of this great late "kathakar". Frankly, I won't feel bad if I am labeled as sadake kathakar because that's who I am. Not all of my stories include "M" words (you know this if you have read all the stories that I have posted here in sajha). If the character I am writing about in the story was not slaved by "m" words, I don't drag that character to "M" world.
When Samrat Upadhyaya uses "F" word without any asterisks, no one seem to complain. Many hastis (including of sajha) have nothing but praise for samrat and his stories. I once read his story in Suskera, the link of which was provided here in Sajha, and was surprised to see him use "F" word in full form repeatedly and still no one questioning that. The content in many of Samrat's stories are quite explicit (to me) but he can get away with that because he is a "great" Nepali writer writing in English. Don't get me wrong. I am not anti Samrat. I wish him success. I don't know for sure what you, Gokul, think about Samrat's writings. So, I don't mean to question [you] why can't you accept me using "M" word when you can accept Samrat's "F" word ? Also, I don't mean to ask "Samrat le huni maile kina nahune?" What I want to know is what is acceptable and what is not? [NOT what is acceptable from whom?].
"I still believe the value of your stories lies in describing everyday mundane events in rochak tarikale and not necessarily using alphabets that go beyond 26 letters of English language. "
I don't dispute this. Yes, it's true that deliberate and conspicuous use of "M" words do not necessarily make a story interesting or rochak one. I am/was just trying to call the character in his/her true presence.
Gokul, I have tried to read every thing you post here. You have impressed me with your writings. My regard to you is quite high and will remain so regardless of your comment on my writings. I have taken your comment positively. Thank you for sharing your view.
BTW Gokul, since we are talking about Bibhakti, I have a question. I have a feeling that you know this [I have seen you, here in sajha, commenting on Nepali grammar]. Please respond if you have time.
Is "ma" a Tritiya bibhakti? I think "Le" is prathama bibhakti that comes with karta kaarak. "Lai" is dwitiya bibhakti that comes with "Karma kaarak". Does tritiya bibhakti comes with "kaaran"?
Deep LE TaruniLAI MotorMA bhagayo.
In this sentence, Karta kaarak Prathama bibhakti "LE" is followed by Karma Kaarak dwitiya bibhakti"LAI" and Kaaran kaarat Tritiya bhibhakti "MA". Correct?
Man ma khuldul khuldul bho ke---tyahi bhe ra make sure ganra lai sodheko---aru Nepali bhasabid harule spasta pari diye ni hunchha.
Thanks.
Thank you all for reading "Bale".
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| playa_from_himalaya |
Posted
on 19-May-03 07:56 PM
good one deep
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| deep |
Posted
on 20-May-03 06:09 AM
Thanks Playa_,
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| playa_from_himalaya |
Posted
on 20-May-03 06:55 AM
I love the way you write and those details cannot be beaten. That reminds me of a friend and I have a feeling that is you. Are you RB? Were you once in Alabama?
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