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Posted
on 01-Jun-03 08:53 AM
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| samana1 |
Posted
on 01-Jun-03 09:30 AM
??! ji
Wow! touching gazzzaal.....
my suggestions ur way! kyaaa
aafno aashu lai khera na fala tyasari
afulai tadpaunu ra asha dekhaunu nai timro bhul ho
tyo ko nai cha ra jash ko aash pura nai huna sakcha ra
pratikshya gara aafno jiwan ko na ta cha kunai aru ko lagi
aafno lagi bacha, chaina yo duniya ma aru ko lagi bachne
kina tutchauu sisha sari jodhna sakdainau kashogari
aafno jiwan cha timro samu jau aafno lakshya khoja,
natadpa tyassari afulai jalaiii
huh! i did it.tara jepayetai .LOL..keep it up hai ??! ji..ramro gazaaal cha..mero suggestion ali ali..
thanks
samana
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| ??! |
Posted
on 01-Jun-03 01:32 PM
Thank you for your reply... ehehe
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| Poonte |
Posted
on 02-Jun-03 09:51 AM
aba Gazal tarfa aankha gaadhnu bho, gunaraj jee? khai...aafno ta aruko samjhana matakiya bhijaune umer sidheko le hola...anoutho laagyo tyo bichaar ;) Noulo jyaan ko aagaman le ali byasta hunu bhaa jasto chha ni?
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| ??! |
Posted
on 02-Jun-03 11:11 AM
Hello Poonteji,
Achel dherai busy bhaiyo.... story lekhne time bhayena.. bichar/bhawana haru aairanchhan... ani kata pokun kahan lekhun hunchha.. ani chhoto six liner haldiyeko... eheheh
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| ruck |
Posted
on 02-Jun-03 11:13 AM
Gunaraj ji,
Saani chori lai kasto cha? nwaran bhai sakyo hola hoina?
Best wishes
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| vivid |
Posted
on 02-Jun-03 01:27 PM
Guna ji,
Kasto dobhase gajal ho?
Yesto bhawana pokhinu parne batawaran ta pakkai chaina nai hola, ki fiction bhawana hun yee?
:)
By any chance do u know Prof. Madan Karkee?
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| ??! |
Posted
on 02-Jun-03 02:38 PM
Ram ram, kati dherai prasna haru...
Ruckji, mera bal bachcha jahan ketaketi sabai aram nai chhan....chhori ko nwaran bhai sakyo.. modern nwaran.. telephone ko one end ma pandit arko end ma ma... speaker phone jodera... hari om tatsat.. bishnu bishnu... "bho balikhe twam asmita asti" bhaniyo... najik mandir chhaina.... tapainlai pani chaiyo bhane bhannu hola...ma contact garai dinchhu.. no commission... hahahahaha
vividji, fiction re.. ehehehe.. thyakkai parnu bho.. yeti khera ta ma runu kelai chha ra?
Dr. Madan Karkee ko nam suneko jasto chai lagdai chha.... tara chineko chhaina...
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| ruck |
Posted
on 02-Jun-03 03:10 PM
Gunaji,dhanyabad... ho ni pandit chahine bela audaicha, tapai lai nai sodhula ni......
By the way, Japan ma hunu hune Dr. Madan Karkee ko kura garnu bha ho ki kya ho???
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| shirish |
Posted
on 03-Jun-03 11:40 AM
Hi gunaji,
Nice try.
if you dont mind, I want to tell you some rules about "gazal", insha allah.
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| ??! |
Posted
on 03-Jun-03 11:52 AM
Thanks shirishji, Hunalai ta yo muktak ho... bhanna matra gajal....
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| shirish |
Posted
on 03-Jun-03 12:00 PM
guna ji,
janne bhayo nabhannu hola hai!
1. ghajal ko title hunna.
2. the length of the one sentence or "sher" is almost equal with other "sher" and they may have no relationship but Rhymes
3. The shers end with the same words.
4. it must have at least three pairs of "sher" ie six lines.
5. the last line should contain your name or upanaam.
However, the modern sayari has no fixed rules as such.
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| khimu |
Posted
on 03-Jun-03 12:13 PM
hey samana that was nice re.. to guraj ko "GAJAL" lai
ani Gunaraj ji wife ko samjhana le ho ki girlfriend ko samjhana le ho testo, anshu le takiya nai bhijaune?
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| ??! |
Posted
on 03-Jun-03 01:13 PM
Shirishji,
Thanks for the info. Though I am not serious about writing gajals, the information helps for everybody. I will come back with some stories when I can have a bit leisure time...
Khimuji, mero rune bela chhaina ahile... vividji le bhani saknu bho fiction bhanera... ahile lai ta...
"Bibiji so rahi hai khana banaraha hun
aafat gale padhi hai usko nibha raha hun"... though I love to cook and enjoy cooking for her these days as she is busy nursing our new born second baby......
ehehehe
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| ruck |
Posted
on 03-Jun-03 01:25 PM
"... though I love to cook and enjoy cooking for her these days as she is busy nursing our new born second baby......
ehehehe "
Gunaji, yeh hui na kuch mardo waali baat...;)
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| Deep |
Posted
on 03-Jun-03 01:34 PM
Gunaraj ji le fiksan fiksan bhane ni ti ktm wa anyatraka dera ka din ma pareko chot lai sano kaathko hammesi nadekhini chheskole jiskayo jasto chha.
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