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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 18-Nov-03 04:09 PM
."Hey ! listen !".
Somebody yells in my direction in the street as I was walking by. I turn around and there's this guy looking in my direction. I turn both sides, look behind me, and ask him
"Who? Me?"
He moves a few steps forward and says
"Yes ! You dumbass."
I take a careful look at him and answer him softly
"I might be dumb but not an ass."
....to be continued.
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| confused |
Posted
on 18-Nov-03 04:25 PM
OOO i want to hear this broda..who kicked who's ass???
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 09:46 AM
..He thinks for a moment and yells back at me
"Oh Yeah ! If you're not an ass then what were you doing with my girlfriend."
I look surprised. I don't even know this guy's name. I don't know where he lives. I don't know what he does. I don't know who his girlfriend is. I also think for a moment and reply back
"Look. I think there's been a mistake. I don't know you and your girlfriend."
He seems a bit surprised too and keeps chewing the gum and making those chop-chop sound that irritates me. He looks on his right and left and then looks straight into my eyes and says very slowly in a threatening manner
"Now. You dumbass...listen to me carefully...I love Anjanee, and if I find that you have been hanging out with her inside the school again...then that will be your last day on earth....got it ??"
Oh ! I get it. So he loves Anjanee. But what does that have to do anything with me. Anjanee is just a good friend of mine and we rarely see each other inside school. We do run into each other sometimes in the school but that only ends in casual hi-hello. And here's this guy who runs into me in the street and threatens to kill me if I don't stop seeing her. I don't know what to say to this guy but words automatically come out of my mouth
"I don't know what you're talking about. Anjanee is just one of my many friends. I don't hang out with her in the school. It's true that I talk to her sometimes but what's wrong with that?"
He starts acting strange and starts chewing even more rapidly. I can't bear the chop-chop sound of that chewing gum. He steps a closer to me and brings his face really close to my nose and again whispers
"Listen. I am not here to listen to your crap. I don't know what you do with Anjanee but there's only one thing I would like you to do."
"What?" I ask.
"Don't even come close to her. Not in the school and not outside the school. Understand?"
I don't know what to say. I am surprised and somewhat scared by this guy. I gather my courage and ask him back
"Are you threatening me?"
The guy backs off a little and speaks in his normal tone for the first time
"No. I am telling you. Now it's up to you, whether you take it as a suggestion or a warning."
He steps back, turns around and keeps moving. I lay there on the same side of the street, same spot- confused and bewildered.
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| KALANKISTHAN |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 09:53 AM
That's it? Hope not!
Ani Ani? ... comeon don't leave us hanging like that! It's going great so far...
;)
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 10:25 AM
..The school-bell rings and the students come flying-out of all the classes at once. They push each other mercilessly inorder to become the first person to reach the ground floor from the first floor. I step aside and give way to those competitors. They run like crazy and whoosh....after two seconds I see them in the ground floor, outside the building, playing "chungi".
I take a look in the middle of the playground and see my friends playing football. I move down the stairs inroder to join them in the game. Just as I am climbing down the stairs, somebody says
"Hello ! "
I turn back. There's my best friend from my class. He comes to me and says
"What are you doing in the break?"
I point towards the middle of the playground and say
"I was thinking of joining in that game. Would you want to?"
"Nah. It's so hot and I don't want to soak my pants with sweat and be stinky for the rest of the afternoon."
I think for a while. He's right. I don't want that either. And so we decide to test each other's manhood in the game of chess.
As we are thinking, I tell him
"Hey ! I met this guy yesterday in the street. He said he loves Anjanee and threatened to kill me if I ever came closer to Anjanee- inside or outside the school."
He looks at me. Looks back at the chess board and moves the camel and gets one of my pawns. He looks back at me and smiles. Looks back at the chess board and tries to guess my next move.
I look at him and say
"Wow ! I just told you that somebody threatened to kill me in the street and you keep quiet ?"
"Oh ! Sorry ! What did that guy say to you again?" Finally he reveals that he didn't pay attention to what I was saying.
I tell him again
"This guy met me in the street yesterday and threatened to kill me."
"But why?" He questions back.
"Because he says he loves Anjanee and doesn't want me to be close to her."
"Must be Deepak." He replies as if that's nothing unusual.
"Who Deepak?" I ask back curiously.
"He lives nearby. He is in deep love with Anjanee." My best friend tells me something that I don't know.
"Is it a one-way or the two-way?" I can't help asking.
"One way." He answers in short.
" So that's not love. is it? How can it be love when both of them don't have the same feeling for one-another?" I ask for an explanation from my friend.
"Why do you care so much?" He seems irritated by my questionnare-responses.
"Because that guy threatened to kill me yesterday for that girl. Don't you think that reason is good enough to care about their relationship?" I feel agaitated.
"He's not gonna do anything to you. I'll tell him not to do anything to you." He replies.
"So you know this guy?" I ask.
"Yeah. I met him last week in the football practice. He's a very good footballer. And a nice guy." He says.
" Since when did nice guys start threatening in the streets?" I oppose his views.
"Why do you ask me?" He back-fires me.
"Because you're the one who knows him." I back-fire him.
Just then we hear someone's footsteps. In our school playing games like chess or ludo or cards in the school premises were illegal, according to the school rules. Teachers would often come into many classrooms during break-hours to inspect if anyone has disregarded the school's policies. So me and my friend hurry and put the board and pieces quickly in my bag.
We look at the door and look back at each other's faces in frustration- the frustration of quitting an interesting chess-game.
The person at the door smiles at us- ignoring our facial expressions, and says
"Hello !"
Me and my friend reply in unison
"Hi ! Anjanee."
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| Recon |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 10:43 AM
Don't you have better thing to post than this crappy imagination.
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| Biruwa |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 10:45 AM
And the plot thickens! ;-)
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 10:45 AM
..a reply to Recon....
Everything i have written is true...there's no imagination.......
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| KaLaNkIsThAn |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 11:27 AM
Yesss! And the plot thickens!!
It's going great! Keep it up!!
ani ani?
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 12:11 PM
."What were you guys doing? Did I disturb?" She apologizes carefully.
"We were playing chess and heard your footsteps. We thought it was Rajbanshi Sir...but it was you." My friend chooses the words carefully not to let her know that we were also talking about her.
"Oh ! Sorry for that." She makes a sorry face.
"That's alright. It's just a game. We can play it anytime again...today or tomorrow." My friend again chooses his words carefully.
I can see hi face turning red as he was desperately in pressure of hiding off the mysteries of discussions. I knew he would turn blue anytime and so I suggested
"Why don't we go outside in the sun then?"
They agreed.
We came out of the classroom and went downstairs into the playground. We sat under a tree- confused and thinking. Nobody among us knew how to start the discussions. So again I went ahead and said
"How are classes?"
Anjanee looked at me and replied
"It's going great. I got an A in social studies test this week."
"That's good" I said, having nothing more to say.
Had she gotten a 'B' I would have said she should improve studies. Had she gotten a 'C' I would have said she should be careful otherwise she might flunk the year. My friend was still confused and would not talk because I knew that if he started talking he would again turn red and blue. So I let him stay quiet and put all the pressures of keeping up the conversation all upon me.
And it happened. A joy to my confused friend. The school bell rang and it was time to go back to the classroom. He stood up, looked at me with a smile, a smile of freedom, and looked at Anjanee and said
"Gotta go to class. Talk to you later."
As he left, I also stood up and said
"Let's go to class."
I looked towards Anjanee. She was staring to a tree far away. I shaked her shoulders, and she looked towards me. I said
"Let's go to class"
She looked down on the ground, and looked towards me in the eye and said
"I have something to tell you"
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| KaLaNkIsThAn |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 12:29 PM
Rajbanshi sir?
Vanasthai?
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| Recon |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 12:35 PM
Imagination or not!!!! But surely a intresting story....And yeah it does reminds me of my old days in banasthali.....Thanks for mentioning my name is your story..." i am Rajbanshi too"
And Yeah if you need to kick deepak guy ass, let me know, i will get it done in couple of minutes...
Keep the story going Dog!!!
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 12:41 PM
...reply to kalanki and recon...
it's not banasthali....
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| Recon |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 12:45 PM
sounds like banasthali...
Rajbanshi and Chungi...
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| oys_chill |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 12:49 PM
hey hey mithelsick...........khoi khoi? ani ani? don't keep us waiting..finish it will ya? ehh...ukus mukus bhai sakyo yaha! fasty.got 30 mins more!
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 12:55 PM
.She kept looking at me for sometime as if I was a stranger. I was feeling bumps inside my stomach in an anticipation of something bad or something really bad. She looks at me and says
"I don't know why I am saying this to you. Maybe because I feel comfortable talking to you." She keeps quiet.
The bumps inside my stomach keep getting bigger and now my heart also starts pounding, and adds to my alreay-so-worse situation. I still manage to control my feelings and SAY
"Okay. Go on"
"There's this guy who has been writing me love letters"
Here it goes. All my fears and confusions and those bumps disappear after that sentence. I know it's not me so there's no problem, right? Or so I thought. I know it must be that stupid Deepak guy.
She looks at me and this time her eyes turn red. Okay this is where I hate girls. They can so easily shed tears at anytime. No sooner she starts crying and she is in tears. I don't know what I should do in this situation- just keep quiet or keep listening or give her a handkerchief or tell her not to cry. I am so confused when I stand infront of crying women and crying girls. She takes out a napking out of her pocket and wipes her tears off. And then looks straight at me and says
"Could you please tell him to stop writing those letters to me?"
I am even more confused. Deepak had warned me yesterday not to talk to this girl or come close to her. And today the very girl comes to me and asks me to go and tell that guy to stop writing her love-letters. But how can I do that? Yeseterday he only threatened to kill me. If I go to him and tell him to stop writing those letters, he will definitely kill me. I stay stunned infront of Anjanee and somehow I manage to say
"But why do you want me to do that?"
She looks at me, wipes her flowing tears again and says in a crying voice
"It's someone from your class"
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| oys_chill |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 12:57 PM
I know where this is heading now :P
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| dead_burton |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 01:22 PM
interesting story bro. things like one-sided love and obession still exists hah, but dude don't worry hang in there. u r free person don't get affected by any dumbass
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| Recon |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 01:31 PM
Seems like that girl likes you dude..Otherwise girls don't cry infront of anyone....
Lucky Bastardd...
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| L-a-x |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 01:59 PM
turning interesting......
she is going to confess that......she likes you and not your friend??
waiting for the rest...
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 02:16 PM
.Not a surprise for me when she says it's someone from my class. She already has a follower outside the school. Hence not a surprise to find a follower inside the school. Or so I thought.
"But...who is it?" I asked.
She said nothing. Took out a letter from her pocket and gave it to me. I looked at her and said
"I don't think I should read it because it's for you"
"Just read the name of the guy who sent it" she replied.
I looked directly at the bottom of the letter. There it was "Amit".
"Okay ! So it's Amit" I said and looked at her.
She didn't utter a word. But it was good to see her stop crying.
"Let's go to class" I said, and lent her my hand to get up.
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| patali |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 02:36 PM
ani ani....hmm nice nice..reminds me of my skool days when there were hott love stuffs going on skool compound eversingle day...wow...phir se jawani yaad aagai...lau lau ani ke bho ..sunnu hatar bhayo malai....
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| L-a-x |
Posted
on 19-Nov-03 02:52 PM
can't wait any more...want it fast...
plz..plz...don't make it like this...finish in a one go..
Yo ta Nepe jiu ko story jastai lagyo ni...coming in pieces.. and in parts...more you get more you want...
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 07:26 AM
.We remained in touch with one another for the whole year. Me and my best friend continued practicing for the ANFA soccer league, and it was here that I developed good friendship with Deepak. So there was nothing more to worry about.
It was finals week and I was studying in my classroom after the class was over.
"Hello !" said Anjanee as she came into the class.
She put her hands into her pocket and took out a packet of "wrigleys". I said
"No thanks ! I hate chewing gums"
I was so occupied with studying that I didn't even notice that she had been chewing the gum the whole time. She stopped chewing, looked around in the classroom, and went to one corner of the classroom and spit her chewing gum in the trash-can. She came back to me and sat on the bench next to mine.
"What are you studying?" She asked.
"Nothing....just practicing some maths problems" I said, still paying more attention to the problems than her.
"So you're studying maths?" She answered and asked at the same time.
"Seems like it" I said, still occupied with my work.
Although I was too occupied with my maths problems, I could feel her eyesy watching my eyes for the whole time. She kept quiet for a few mninutes and didn't disturb me- hoping me to finish the problem quickly and then pay attention to her.
I finished the problem, took a long breath and said
"How've you been today?"
"Good until now" she replied.
"Sorry....I bored you." I apologised, and put my hands on the desk, as if it was a surrenderring act.
She moved her hands forward and put both her hands over mine. I felt uneasy but could not say anything. Just then someone came into the classroom.
The person looked at Anjanee, who by now had already moved her hands away from mine, then looked at me, and said
"Meet me in my office. Right now !" my school principal ordered me.
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| oys_chill |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 07:40 AM
tyo bichha ko part ta missing ni???? climax bina nai ending ma puryaune..kya khalli hau mithelsick ta! :(
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| Recon |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 08:05 AM
What a crappy principle...Must be a big asss.. or should i say ..kawab mai hadii..
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 09:04 AM
.."Sir ! There's nothing going on in between us" I tried to explain my principal.
"If it is so, then what was it that I saw?" he replied furiously.
"What did you see?" I asked as if nothing had happened.
"I saw you guys holding hands" principal replied politely in a low voice.
"I wasn't. She was" I tried to speak the truth.
"What do you mean you weren't? Are you trying to say that I am blind?" principal sir responded furiously again.
"Sir ! I wasn't holding her hand. She was holding my hand...and she did so in order to show support to me" I tried to provide him with a reason.
"What did you need support for?" he asked back.
"Nothing...I was having problems with solving a few maths questions...she held my hand as a support...assuring me that I could do it" I said.
I was kicking myself in my thoughts. What a crappy reason that was for a girl to hold a guy's hand. I never believed the principal would buy that reason. But after thinking for a while and scanning my entire red face carefully, he told me to leave.
I came out of his office, and went upstairs to my classroom.
"Sorry" Anjanee said to me as soon as I entered the classroom.
"For what?" I asked as if nothing had happened to me.
"The principal scolded you because of me" she said.
"No he didn't. He just called me to check my class progress" I lied, yet another time.
"Oh ! I thought...." she stopped as she was trying to say something.
"Don't worry about it" I tried to assure her that nothing was wrong.
I looked at her apologetic face. Just then the school bell rang. I put my books in my bag. Stood up, looked at her face again, and said
"I can see that you are still worried. The principal said nothing to me, okay ! Now let's go home"
She looked at me, tried to smile unsuccessfully, and moved out of the classroom.
We went into her classroom, she picked her bag and we headed out of the school. As we were walking along the street, somebody shouted at us
"Anjanee"
We both turned around. There he was, Deepak. He came near us, and Anjanee said
"Yes. Do I know you?"
Deepak gave me a smile, then turned to her and said
"Can I talk to you for a moment?"
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| patali |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 09:07 AM
oho...........ahem ahem...la aba suru bhayo pheri arko mod......
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| L-a-x |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 09:18 AM
sounds interesting
la la ke hudai chha ho?? waiting hai waiting....
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| Recon |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 09:18 AM
Dude what club do you play for Anfa soccer league...I am in a league too but never heard of your name...
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 09:21 AM
..answer to Recon...
it was ANFA school league....not national league...
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| Recon |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 09:31 AM
oHHH ALLRIGHT DUDE
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 11:48 AM
..I wait at the side of the street for the next five minutes. After that Anjanee comes back towards me as Deepak leaves. I watch her face, and it shows lots of disturbance within her, she's almost crying but is brave enough not to let the tears roll down her eyes.
"What did he say?" curiously I ask.
"He says he loves me"
"What did you say?" my curiousity heightens.
"I said I love somebody else" she replied without any hesitation.
I looked at her face again. She seemed to be smiling with her answer this time.
"Why are you smiling?" I asked.
"I have never been so satisfied before. When I told that guy that I love somebody else, I felt the utmost satisfaction of my life. I don't know why that satisfaction arised. Maybe it was because I was so bold to tell him the truth or..maybe.." she stops in between.
"Or?" I ask.
"Nothing" she replied.
We were outside the school's hostel now. Since I stay in the school hostel, it was time for me to go in, and time for her to move forward. She lived just one block away from the hostel.
"Bye Anjanee. I will see you next week" I said.
She waved back at me and smiled. Then moved towards her house.
As I entered the hostel and climbed up the stairs, somebody tapped on my shoulders from behind. I turned back.
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| Recon |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 11:56 AM
Was Anjanee is indian? Was she really hot? Seems like lots of guys are after her?
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| patali |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 12:41 PM
oho ke ho kasto ma ending ho tyo...hindi serial ko jasto ...kisi nai tap kiya...aur banki...next episode mein...wah..bhai wah...kyasa story hai...lau na ho kati akul byakul banayera rakhnu bhayeko..malai ending sunnu paye pugchha.....lau na ...sundinu paryo yo awaj pani....
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| Robert Frost |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 01:13 PM
lau lau thokau thokau bro aru...sakau sakau...yesto ryakh ryakh ti napara na ho...
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| Recon |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 01:19 PM
what the ending neee?
Probably this mickthesick going to prove that he is a hero!!!
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 01:31 PM
.."I had a nice weekend" Anjanee says smiling.
"Oh yeah ! What did you do?" I ask as I think about my next move.
My best friend and I are competing our manhood in chess. It's not sure who will win but the game does seem a little in his favor. He has more chances than I do but who really cares. It's just a game.
"I met my grandparents last weekend. We went to their house and it was great" she was now more than smiling, short of laughing.
"That's good. Good to know that you enjoyed" I say as I get my friend's one of the camels with my castle.
He looks irritated for giving me the camel. He starts thinking very hard for his next move. I am surprised why he isn't talking today.
"What did you do?" Anjanee asked me.
"Nothing unusual. You know there's not much to do inside the hostel. They don't let us go out in the weekends." I said.
Anjanee's smiles faded away by now. Was it because of my reply? I guess not because there was nothing sad about what I said.
She stared at me for a while and said
"Can I say you something?"
"Go on" I said casually.
She stood from her bench, came to mine, sat down on it, brought her face real close to mine, and kissed me. It continued for a minute..or more...I am not sure.
"Hey...what's going on?" I heard my best friend yelling at me.
"Sorry" I replied to him.
"You can't be doing this man" He yelled at me again, and continued, "It's two o'clock in the morning and you are sleeping? Wake up it's time to go to practice for the game."
I opened my eyes, looked around. Anjanee wasn't there and that was not my classroom. It was my bed. Sheer frustration ran through my veisn, I don't know why. But I had to say something to my friend.
"You should have woke me up after five minutes...you know!" I said to him.
"Why?" he asked, "Were you dreaming?"
"Yeah !....it's strange. I was dreaming of Anjanee." I replied but didn't utter a word about the kiss.
"What were you doing?" he asked.
"I wasn't doing anything. Anjanee was kissing me" I replied, rubbed my eyes, and looked towards my friend.
My face suddenly turned red as I saw the person behind my friend.
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| Recon |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 01:37 PM
You mean to say, you're kissing your guy friend.....
Rock on Dog
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| hansy420 |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 01:46 PM
"As I entered the hostel and climbed up the stairs, somebody tapped on my shoulders from behind. I turned back. "
what hapenned after that? who tapped on your shoulders? Do you not remember as it was just a dream? You skipped a part or two it seems like....thats not cool bro.
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| patali |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 01:46 PM
hyaaaaaaaa....pheri tyastai ...hindi serial ko para..lau na ho chito ......
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 02:55 PM
...reply to hansy420.....
i wanted someone to point that out....i was just trying to know who was paying the whole attention....
by the way...that tap was real.....and it was one of my friends, Rabin...but nothing unusual happened then...so i just skipped it.
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 03:10 PM
...continued.
"So you dream of kissing Anjanee" Rajbanshi Sir asked me.
"Sir that was a dream" I tried to explain him that I had no control on it, and moreover it was just a dream, not a real thing.
Rajbanshi Sir was our games teacher as well as the hostel incharge. He was notorious for beating students very hard and often was complained to the principal for his misbehaviors to other lady teachers and students as well.
The only reason why our principal would not kick him out of the schoo was because, although he was cruel in his behaviors, he was very dedicated to his work and had good rapport with us( the students in hostel).
"Let's go for practice" Rajbanshi sir said.
"Okay...I'll be downstairs in five minutes" I said, picked my towel and headed for the shower.
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I finished my shower, dressed, put my football boots, shorts and t-shirt in my bag, and ran downstairs. As I turned left on the second stairway, I bumped into someone. I fell on the stairs and rolled a couple of stairs down.
Somehow I managed to stand up, and getting hold of the bag again, I looked upstairs if the other person was okay.
"Sorry !!" I said softly, and asked "Are you okay?"
"Yeah ! I think so" the girl said and felt her head.
It seemed like she fell too and got hurt on her head.I climbed up the stairs and held her head in my hands to see if there were any bruises.
"I'm okay" she said.
"Are you sure?" I asked, just to confirm what she said.
"Yeah" she said and again felt her head.
I stood there looking at her feeling her head. I forwarded my hand, and said my name.
"I'm Puja" she said and shook my hand.
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| SITARA |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 03:30 PM
reading and reading and reading!!!!!!!!!
waiting and waiting and waiting! :)
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 07:04 PM
.."Hey guys" Amit said as he entered the classroom.
"Hey Amit" all of us said in union.
We started having casual talks. Amit came to my desk and asked
"Did you do the maths homework?"
"Yes...why? Do you need it?" I asked.
"Yeah...I forgot to do it" he said scratching his forehead.
"Do you ever not forget to do maths homework?"
"I do it sometimes" he tried to reason.
"And when was that 'sometimes'?" I asked.
Amit watched me and tried to remember the last time he had done his maths homework. He could not remember and in a frustrating voice he said
"Listen..just say yes or no"
"Yes or no to what?" I asked.
"Yes or no to whether you want to give me your homework or not." Amit answered plainly, in as straightforward way as possible.
"Okay....Take it" I said and handed him my maths notebook.
As he turned and was moving towards his desk, I don't know what occured to me and I said
"I suppose doing maths is not as easy as writing love letters"
He stopped moving, looked straight in the blackboard, looked down on the floor, looked straight to the blackboard again, then turned back and came towards me.
In a surprised voice, he looked straight into my eyes, and asked
"How do you know about my love etters?"
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| Rosie |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 07:35 PM
Soooooo cute...I think you'll end up with Pooja. Is Anjanee her real name? Its kinda unusual.
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 20-Nov-03 07:39 PM
...answer to rosie....
yes her real name is anjanee....but pooja's real name is not puja.....i have changed her name.....
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| Robert Frost |
Posted
on 21-Nov-03 05:41 AM
how many episodes do you have?? What is this?
Man you are a SERIAL killer...
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| ou812 |
Posted
on 21-Nov-03 06:30 AM
1001 Sajha Nights. I have a strong suspicion that by the end of these pulp stories, either Anjanee or Pooja will have a healthy bouncing baby.
Besides irrelevant comments, Ani Ani?
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 21-Nov-03 08:33 AM
..I looked at him, while thinking a reply for him. He came further closer to me face and asked
"How and what do you know about my love letters?"
"Anjanee told me that you had written her one" I replied carefully without mentioning that I did have a look at his letter.
"You two are close?" he asked.
"Not really....just hi-hello" I lied.
"Then why did she tell you about my letter?" he asked.
"She wanted me to tell you that...." I hesitated to finish the sentence and stopped.
"Tell what?" he asked with curiousity.
"..she wanted me to tell you to stop writing her those letters" I answered, as politely as possible.
"Which means she does not like me. Right?" he asked in a frustrating voice.
"I don't know man...I think you should ask her yourself....it's between you guys....who am I to say anything in the middle?" I tried to be diplomatic.
"Do you think I still have a chance?" he asked.
I know he wanted a few words of hope. Being a good friend how could I say a clear 'NO' to his question. Hesitantly but trying to sound polite I said
"That's why I am telling you to go and ask her"
"Do you think I should?" he asked.
"I think you should" I tried to assure him.
Just then my best friend entered the classroom. He came directly to me and Amit, put his bag under the desk, looked at us, smiled and then turned to Amit and said
"Hey Amit...you know one thing?"
"What thing?" Amit asked.
"My firend here" he said and pointed to me, and continued," dreams of a girl now a days"
"Which girl?" asked Amit.
"There's one girl from the eigth grade..Anjanee." my best friend replied.
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| patali |
Posted
on 21-Nov-03 08:55 AM
hmmmmmmmmmmmmmm....pheri ke hune ho....
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| Recon |
Posted
on 21-Nov-03 09:13 AM
Man!!! your story is getting boring....NO fight scene...no seex thing
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| patali |
Posted
on 21-Nov-03 10:01 AM
yo ta bhayena ho....yasto dashain ko khashi jasto ghiti ghiti pani banayera rakchhan hami sojha saja ka janata lai...lau hai chyattai chinaunu paryo.....
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 21-Nov-03 10:31 AM
..Amit looked at me in disbelief as if I had stolen something precious from him. I looked at him and I said
"Look...it was just a dream. I saw her in my dream only once...is that really my fault. Aren't dreams supposed to be random..I don't have any control over it. So you guys can't balme me" I provided my reasoning.
"That's alright. Do you like her..I mean love her" Amit asked in a slow and steady voice.
"No..for god's sake Amit...i saw her in my dream once. That doesn't mean I like her" I replied in frustration.
"Then why did you see her in your dream?" Amit asked again.
"I don't know. I told you already...that was only once and that's it..." I said.
"Still...it proves that you like her."he said.
"How does that prove I like her?" I asked angrily.
"Well...you saw her in your dream...that proves it" he replied.
"I see many things in my dream..."
"That means you like those things" he said.
"Not necessarily...I saw myself sweating in the exam hall during history exams...does that mean I like history classes?" I asked, as if this argument would change his mind.
"Exams and girls are different" he rejected my argument.
"Can't it be that I saw Anjanee in my dream because I don't like her?" I proposed my final argument.
Everyone in the class who heard me say that looked towards me. Amit never moved his eyes away from my eyes. I was afraid he would come up with something to reject even this argument of mine.
After thinking for a while, he said
"Are you saying you hate Anjanee?"
"I didn't say that. Why would I hate her?" I said.
"But you said...you didn't like her...so you saw her in your dream...right?" he asked again.
I was beginning to lose my temper over this absurd discussion. I gathered all my anger and yelled at Amit
"If I say that I hate Anjanee and that is going to end this discussion then okay...I hate Anjanee...you happy now?"
I yelled and looked at his face to see if he was happy or not. But the rest of the class were looking at the door. Anjanee stood there, silent, confused, bewildered, and started to cry.
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| L-a-x |
Posted
on 21-Nov-03 10:39 AM
la khattam bhayo....ni
dhentaran...waiting for the rest..to be precise..next I should say.....
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| patali |
Posted
on 21-Nov-03 10:54 AM
hera bichari anjaneee....tyasto maya chha jasto chha usko maan bhitra..." I hate her" bhanne sabda le ta khattam nai parne bhayo ni...aba hindi movie jhain...keti runa thalchha..keta janchha samjhaunchha..." dekho anjanee...I dont mean that..ladke log mujhe cheed rahe the..esiliye mujhe kahana padha...meine tumhe ekbaaar mere sapno mein kiss karte hue dekha tha.....jis din se meine tumhe dekha hai..Uss din se mein sirf tumhari hi bare mein sochta hum...blah blah..aur suru hoga mickthesick ka love story..hai na.???...jaiye bhaisaheb..age jaiye....aba chhain sabbaisiddhyaunu paye yo retteko gardan alik sanchho hunthyo ki????
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 21-Nov-03 12:03 PM
..Anjanee looked at me with crying eyes, turned around, and left the door.
"Shit !..you must be the happiest man on earth right now...aren't you?" I said to Amit.
"What did I do?" he answered.
"What did you do?" I asked with anger in my voice.
"Yeah ! What did I do?" he asked again.
"You are the one responsible for this discussion and this outcome of the discussion" I said.
"What about you?...you are the one who dreams of the girl that I love" he answered back.
"How many times do I have to tell you shithead that it was a dream...can't you understand that...??" this time I yelled really loud at him and caught his collar.
"Do you want to fight?" he asked.
"Sorry..." I said and removed my hands from his collar.
I stood up and left the classroom.
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| hansy420 |
Posted
on 21-Nov-03 12:39 PM
dhyatteri!!!! its a rip off dude...yeti saano saano serial nabanau na
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| patali |
Posted
on 21-Nov-03 12:49 PM
...yo ta thyakkai NTV ko para bhayo hai....adha ghanta ko serial ma tyahan mathi advertisements....alikato laamo parnu apryo...ani chyttai gardan chinaunu paryo....lau na...
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| Recon |
Posted
on 21-Nov-03 01:09 PM
where is fight scene ..where is seex scene...
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| Bichar |
Posted
on 21-Nov-03 01:38 PM
Mickthesick is a student of Soap Opera. Little substance, lot of suspense and goes on forever. You do a pretty good job though.
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 21-Nov-03 08:06 PM
.Anjanee had her face covered with her hands. I could see the tears rolling down her eyes, into her palms and then onto the desk.
I entered the classroom, stood by her side- not knowing what I should do in this situation. After a few minutes she realised that I was standing by her side. She raised her head, wiped her tears with he left hand, looked at me with her teary eyes and said
"Do you really hate me?"
"No Anjanee. ..why would I hate you?" I said
"But I heard you say that"
"What you heard was a mistake...I had lost control over myself over the discussion...I had to say that in order to stop the discussion" I tried to be as true as possible.
"What made you say that?" she asked.
" Amit would not stop arguing with me...unless I would say that I don't like you" I spoke the truth again.
"Why would he want to her that?"
"Because.....he thinks I love you" I said slowly.
She stopped sobbing. She looked at me, and after a few seconds of looking inot my eyes she asked
"Do you?"
"Do I ? ....Do I what?" I asked, as if I failed to understand her question.
"Do you love me?" Anjanee asked me.
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| Thule Rai B |
Posted
on 21-Nov-03 09:47 PM
yo katha ta mahabharat ko bhanda pani lamo po rahecha yaar please the end chai kahile ho yo katha ko .
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 22-Nov-03 01:23 AM
......a note to ___ angel.......
sorry could not say you bye ...hope your connections are okay by now.
thanks for the talks.
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| BMW |
Posted
on 22-Nov-03 01:29 PM
Mickthesick did indeed love miss. anjanee but didn't have the balls to let her know then when she asked him point blank. Anjanee at this point was hurt and felt betrayed and thought a lot about why mickthesick didn't return the love she had for him. Puja on the other hand had a crush on mickthesick and took this opportunity to further poison their relationshp and spread rumours that she had lost her viriginity with mickethesick.
When this lead to anjanee's ears, she couldn't take it, the thought of her first love with someone and that someone being her own cousin (mama ko chori) made her livid and most of all deceived. She cried for days, skipped school and finally decided to confront puja herself during one of their nephew's paasni.
During the confrontation, it lead to angry and jealous anjanee pulling puja's hair and left to go see mickhesick right away being the scandalous one left to see mickthesick right away and fabricated the story that anjanee was accusing of her sleeping with mickethesick.
To be Continued...
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 22-Nov-03 02:09 PM
...reply to BMW.....
dude...you got it all wrong.....
next episode is the final episode of this story......don't forget to check it out.....i'll finish this story sometimes today or tomorrow
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 22-Nov-03 02:35 PM
..I was stunned. I was not sure how to asnwer that question. I thought for a while but my mind was blank, thoughtless.
"You don't. Do you?" Anjanee asked again, in a sorry voice.
"I don't know what to say Anjanee...but I would like to say something to you" I said.
"What do you have to tell me?" she asked, still trying to wipe her tears.
"I saw you in my dream once....and that was the reason why Amit and I were arguing" I told her.
I knew there was no point in telling this to her. But I felt that I should tell her.
"So?" she asked.
"I don't know" I replied.
"That was a plain simple question that I asked....and you say you don't know" she said.
"That is what I am trying to say to you Anjanee....it's not easy to answer that" I said.
She looked at me and I looked at her. And we both knew there were anxieties growing within our minds. I continued,
"I saw you in my dreams....and to tell you the truth...."I stopped.
She looked at me with a "go-on" look so I continued,
"...and you were kissing me"
She looked at me and tried to smile but failed. She kept staring at me.
"Now anyone would think that I love you.....and that's why I dreamt of kissing you" I said.
"Do you?" she asked again.
"Do I what Anjanee?" I asked as if I had failed to understand her question again.
"Do you love me?" she asked, and suddenly tears started rolling down her eyes again. This time more rapidly. And she didn't even care to wipe those tears, and let them roll down her cheeks.
"Please...Anjanee..." I said.
I grabbed her handkerchief that was lying on her desk, and I wiped her tears off with it.
After a minute or so, she seemed to be controlling herself again. So I said
"If you cry then I can't answer your questions....."
I hugged her for a few more minutes. She gathered her energy and asked again,
"Do you?"
"Do you?" I answered her question with another question.
She looked at me with her wet eyes, and started to cry again but managed to say
"Yes !"
I looked at her. I could see the truth in her tears, in her eyes and in her cries.
"I am very sorry Anjanee..but I don't have the same feeling towards you" I said, and I realised that I almost cried with those words coming out of my mouth.
"I am so sorry" I said again.
Anjanee kept crying, tears rolling down her eyes. I put my arms around her and she leaned on my shoulder.
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| Rosie |
Posted
on 22-Nov-03 03:05 PM
Cruel man!!! I hope your heart gets broken too :)
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 22-Nov-03 03:13 PM
..answer to Rosie....
rosie...my heart has been broken 2 times....
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| buzz |
Posted
on 22-Nov-03 06:42 PM
that is so cruel... why didn't you just tell her how you felt about her. from everything that you have wrote so far, it is apparent that you love her. man, you are a coward. i feel sorry for anjanee.. the sad part is that you asked her to confess her love to you before you shattered her... do you even have a heart??
anyway, keep the story coming..
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 22-Nov-03 07:47 PM
....answer to Buzz.......
yeah.....i realised that I made that mistake....but it was too late. Anjanee quit the school after a week and moved somewhere else.
I haven't seen her since then.
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| Rosie |
Posted
on 22-Nov-03 07:54 PM
And then, you hooked up with Puja?
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 22-Nov-03 08:00 PM
...answer to Rosie......
Puja is another part of the story.....do you guys want me to continue with Puja's part.....??
i thought you guys didn't want any more of this story....
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| Rosie |
Posted
on 22-Nov-03 08:05 PM
Another part of the story? Did Puja have a thing for you, too? God!! You probably think you're so hot. Wishful thinking......
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| oys_chill |
Posted
on 22-Nov-03 09:16 PM
man mickthesick.....
when u start something....show some courtesy to end it properly.....:) at least for the readers sake..u r jumping all over the place now.......some bollywood twist, some hollywood hype :P...on a personal note......jawos puja pani.....kei kaam bha po...padum basum!
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| hansy420 |
Posted
on 22-Nov-03 10:35 PM
I think the endings awesome. But that doesn't mean whatever this guy said to Anjalee was pleasant. Most of the ppl didn't like the ending because he didn't say what what we all wanted to hear. But he was just telling us a story and not all stories have happy endings. But the way he presented it was just terrific. And the ending was very ironic. job well done!
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| hansy420 |
Posted
on 22-Nov-03 10:46 PM
by the way, did you lie about your feelings? Although its too late and there's no use asking you that question now, It feels great to have the author himself available to answer any doubts relating to the story. So just attempting to utilize this privilege :)
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| recon |
Posted
on 23-Nov-03 10:55 AM
Mickthesick,
You did the right thing by telling her, you don't have samething man!!! Rather than lying to her to comfort her for few seconds... Would have broken her heart badly later on.....There is nothing you can do about it, if you don't love her, can you?....Its allright to be selfish sometimes....
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 23-Nov-03 01:20 PM
.....answer to Oys_chill.........
i think i did end the story the way it should have.....please read the answer that I gave to Rosie for her question........everything will be clear to you and you will also feel that I stopped and ended the story at the right place.
about continuing the story with Puja.....I am still not sure about that......but there is a good chance that I might continue the story.
...........answer to Hansy_420..........
first of all thanks you for liking the ending....and about your question "did you lie about your feelings?"........the answer is "yes" and also a "no".
i did have a softer side for Anjanee but I was not in love with her.....so I could not lie.
.........answer to Recon...........
you are right .......If I had said that I loved her at that time and if she knew that I did not love her later.......then I think she would have been more devastated.
but anyways the results would be the same......she quit the school after a week and moved somewhere else.
I haven't seen her since then...and don't know where she is.
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| prawin |
Posted
on 23-Nov-03 02:27 PM
to mickthestick--
thanks for writing this. thanks for writing at all.
although it is rarely discussed, there is more "writing" being done on the web than there is being published in Nepal. writing on the web in Nepali is miniscule as compared to writing in English [perhaps because it is easier to type in English than it is to learn how to type in Nepali... i hope they get windows in Nepali, and also devnagari keyboards].
most importantly, there is a sharp division between those who write for the web, and those who write at all, in Nepal--the fact that a group has access to the web is an important division in tiself.
i think it is important to document the rise of "writing" [a little too hesitant to call it literature] from Nepal. how often does Manjushree Thapa publish ehr work through the web? perhaps she imagines a readership that doesn't include any of us. but compared to her body of work, the amount of Nepali writing, in english or in nepali, is enormous, and should invite just as much attention.
it would be fun if mickthestick compiled his postings into a coherent, complete piece.
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 23-Nov-03 03:29 PM
.....answer to Prawin......
I would have loved to present this story in one post....but it would have been too long and boring to the reader.
So I posted the story iin fragments...which in turn brought excitement and anxiety in the readers to read further.
Thank you Prawin for the appreciation.
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| SITARA |
Posted
on 23-Nov-03 07:03 PM
micthesick:
I appreciate your guts! You did not lie! :)
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| buzz |
Posted
on 23-Nov-03 07:32 PM
but.. why did you ask anjanee if she loved you or not before you told her you did not love her. isn't that being selfish.. ??
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| patali |
Posted
on 24-Nov-03 07:46 AM
awwwwwwwww....but the ending just doesnot seem like what we readers were assuming...It was just so apparent from your earlier episodes that you had deep feelings for anjanee....seeing a gurl in a dream, kissing her, comforting her while she is in pain, fighting with your own freind just because he mentions about a gurl...all those circumstances convinces a reader that you indeed have deep feelings for her..your posting in sajha about your life-story makes it even more convincing about her image and feelings you had for her until today....mickthesick ji..it is just so surprising you did not let out your true feelings...as a reader I am just astonished..and stunned...nice piece....Happy thanksgiving to all of you...
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 24-Nov-03 11:59 AM
......answer to Sitara.........
I appreciate your appreciation.
........answer to Buzz..........
I have already mentioned earlier that I made a mistake by asking her feelings .....I regret that mistake to this day.....I should not have asked her that question when I did not have the same feelings for her....as a result I have regrets.
.......answer to Patali........
Life is never too easy to assume.....what we assume doesnot become true all the time. And the same happened with my story. It did not end the way you assumed it to end.
About my feelings towards Anjanee and my comforting her or fighting with my friend for her.......I was just trying to be a nice person when I was fighting for her......I was just trying to be good friend when I was comforting her.
Being nice to someone doesnot mean I love that person ....does it?
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 24-Nov-03 12:00 PM
....AND THIS MESSAGE IS FOR EVERYONE.......
thank you all for reding this story and sharing your views and feelings.....thank you for all the appreciations and the critiques.
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| hansy420 |
Posted
on 24-Nov-03 12:26 PM
I heard from a special source that there is an alternate (happy) ending to this story. How true is that? If so, can you post it so that everyone will leave this thread happy and satisfied? :-D :-D
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 24-Nov-03 12:43 PM
.......answer to Hansy_420........
I know what you mean but sadly there is no alternate happy ending.
I know what you want to know more about is about Puja....but I am still thinking about writing further about Puja....I am not sure about that.
Till then you will have to accept the sad ending with Anjanee...sorry.
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| rbaral |
Posted
on 24-Nov-03 12:59 PM
Mickthesick,
You have a very good story here. I enjoyed it thoroughly.
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| czar |
Posted
on 24-Nov-03 02:03 PM
Mick,
Excellent narration! You effectively used transitions that allowed readers to give free reign to their imaginations and participate in the tale. A canny reading of your audience allowed you to lead them in any direction you wanted. So skillfully was it done that, at the conclusion of the tale, some users even vented their disappointment at you!
If a writer can leave the reader thirsting for more and wistful for one outcome over the other, as you did successfully, it bespeaks of talent and an intimate grasp of the nuances of human needs and desires. You got em good!
Well done!
Cheers !
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 24-Nov-03 03:04 PM
........answer to rbaral.......
Thank you.
........answer to Czar........
I am flattered.
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 25-Nov-03 07:10 AM
.......answer to Ashish.......
yes. that bump in the stairs did lead to something but I would rather not write here because if I start it then it will be as long as the Anjanee part of the story was....and I think that will bore everyone.
So I think it's better if my story ends with Anjanee.
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| L-a-x |
Posted
on 25-Nov-03 10:44 AM
mickthesick,
when u r half way, why not make it full??
puja ko barema ni sunum na...
great story indeed
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| GurL_Interrupted |
Posted
on 25-Nov-03 11:44 AM
.......... :-)!
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| KALANKISTHAN |
Posted
on 25-Nov-03 01:06 PM
To kaam-red Ye G I ji..
Aaai yaai yaaa Kaam-red!
Da sajha lady marmalade!
with a crown on her head!!
Why is you "winkin' winkin'" on each n every thread blinkin' on blinkin' off "ON OFF ON OFF" n "OFF ON OFF ON" them poor dhukdhuki of FOSLA hearts of sajhapur?? You are performing "QATLE-AAM SARE-AAM" and makin' them poor hearts "thinkin' thinkin'" 'bout hara-kiri-in' when you goin' "winkin' winkin" your MRIGANAYANI Nayan's over them......
grrrrr...
Remember we should be in hidin' hidin'... n u were suppposed to be clingin' clingin' more on LESS-MAKEUP than go "winkin' winkin'" your eys on sajhapuri's Om puri's and Amrish puri's.... If you again winkin' winkin' on the public, I'll be forced not to buyin' buyin' you a gumboot n makeup KIT ... ani then you will see how you go dancin' dancin' to that JHARANA-KO-MUNTIRA fishin' fishin' ni ... grrrrr....
grrrr again!!! :D:D:D
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| BMW |
Posted
on 25-Nov-03 03:39 PM
yo mick,
LET'S HEAR IT BRO!!! GO ON!!!
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| Doctor Bee |
Posted
on 25-Nov-03 04:22 PM
You didn't reply my email!
This is a GREAT story. I was planning to write an alternate fictional story out of this story (with a happy ending), but writer-saap here didn't reply me. Oh well. I might write it SOME day.
Doctor Bee
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| GurL_Interrupted |
Posted
on 26-Nov-03 12:13 AM
To Kaam-raid raided, being raided OR raiding ;-) Pp!
*muzic* Sajha Lady Marmaaa~aaalade! Bua....................:p! Raaaaaaaaaaaay SSSaa! :=D! Me no winking-blinking to them dhukdhuki FOSLA hearts of sajhapurrrr....Me only going "durrr durrrr!" (faaaaar awaaaay). Me no going "right thurrr...right thurrrr" :=D!....Me only staying "right hurrrr, right hurrrrr!" :=P!
Grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr!
Yeah, me remember beeeeeeeeg time we be in "hidin' hidin'"... that's y u no more see me here in sajhapurrr "sliding sliding." Makeup kit and gumboot u "buying-buying"...or else ur kaamred :'-( *snifflez* be "crying & dying." Do u want thaaaaaaaaaaaaaaat?
Grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr!
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Arey oh Devaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa YB :=P,
IsssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssH!, Diya bujna lagi sakeuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu :=P!
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| KALANKISTHAN |
Posted
on 26-Nov-03 11:42 AM
Ye G I ji, ellllllo ji suno ji!
Wai Wai Bee?
Wai Bee "cryin', dyin', squealin', whinin'". gumboot laayin', makeup garin' kholaa tirma macha marna gain', singin' singin' "bhaishi maryo hai maya bhir bata khasera" ni, no hissin', issssin', missin' wai wai... just do fishin'-sishin'. hehe.. khaali haat ma diya samating, bairi piya gaaing, threatenin' me from hidin'... Macha maarera no lyaain', bhare ke khaain', Mukh ma maad kasari laain'.... We are still in hidin' kaamred!!!
grrrrr.... issssssssssss
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| mickthesick |
Posted
on 29-Nov-03 11:46 AM
.......answer to Doctor Bee.......
I am very sorry...I have not got any emails from you. I would have definitely replied if I had got one.
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