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| kusume rumal |
Posted
on 28-Apr-04 06:09 AM
here's my try...
Man ko kunai kuna ma umanga ta baaki nai chha,
" Hoina ahile nabhaye pani katai na katai ta chha u" bhanne jhino asha baaki nai chha.
Bihani ko mirmire sangai ritto mutu le kolte ferchha,
raat bhari ko anindo ankha aba biunjhiyera sapana korna thalchha.
Bainsha ko taranga ma, sunaulo bhawishya ko kalpana ma,
maya ko artha sayad gumeko thiyo.
Ahile jawani ko dosadhma , naya jiwan ko dhoka ma,
maya garne tyo mutu khojdai chhu,
uhi 'Ek' ko pratikshya ma.
Man ko kunai kuna ma umanga ta ajhai baaki nai chha
"Hoina ahile nabhaye pani katai na katai ta chha u" bhanne jhino asha ta baaki nai chha,
baaki nai chha.......
That Dhoka is dhoka as in door not dhokhebaaj khale dhoka.
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| Poonte |
Posted
on 28-Apr-04 08:02 AM
Ahem! Kya marra! Eloquently expressed, kusume_rumal!
Dhukera basda feri off-side hola hai...jaam jaam...aafai laagam khojima...ani bhettauna ali sajilo hola ki? ;)
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| kusume rumal |
Posted
on 29-Apr-04 04:34 AM
bhettayho ki maachha maachha bhyaguta hunchha ra po maryo Poonte ji... jindagi ko mero kathor satyata... babbai sabai bhyaguta... machha ta parya hoina...
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| kusume rumal |
Posted
on 29-Apr-04 04:43 AM
well Poonte ji here goes the final verse
Mero chheu baata jane harek yattri ko muhar ma
usko chhayan khojne garchhu ( katai uhi po ho ki!!!)
Malai herera muskan dine harek oth ma
usaiko mayako pratibimba bhettauna khojchhu .
Tara khoi ?
Tara khoi ahile samma bhetiyena uslai
prem ko sagar attaune yo ritto mutu ma paani ko ek thopa pani parena ajhai
Tyai pani
tyai pani, uslai bhettaune asha ta baki nai chha
Pratikshya ma thakeka yi nayan haru ko abhilasha ajha baki nai chha
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| nepalki_chori |
Posted
on 29-Apr-04 05:46 AM
nice piece. Got to read this kinda poem here, a real kabita........nice words selection !!
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| kusume rumal |
Posted
on 02-May-04 03:17 AM
Thanks Nepalichori.. sorry for responding it this late... was away for a while. This was my sanotino prayash.. and your comment was encouraging. my eternal wait is draining all my energy , if therez any juice (energy; no pun intended) left, I will give it a shot again.
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| kusume rumal |
Posted
on 02-May-04 03:21 AM
and btw dont be offended if you think I got your name wrong... I deliberately said nepali chori as you could recognize the depth of another nepali chori ko sudhha nepali heart....
K garnu kura bigarepachi ta milaunai paryo ni ;)
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