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| Soleil |
Posted
on 25-May-04 10:27 PM
FREEDOM
I don’t want your freedom
If being free is to be enchained by your puritanical taboo
Responsibility isn’t the price of freedom, no
If it’s only the destitute who needs to pay
I don’t want your freedom
If being free is to be enslaved by your hypocrisies
Despotism and bureaucracy isn’t the law and order, no
If it’s only the powerless who must obey
I don’t want your freedom
If being free is to enunciate your chauvinistic decree
Patriotism isn’t the mistrust of loyalty, no
If it’s only the voiceless who cannot disagree
I don’t want your freedom
If being free is to entrust your ostensibly immaculate creed
Evil isn’t the image of God, no
If it’s only the tolerant who should worship your bigotry
I don’t want your freedom
If being free is to witness the annihilation of the innocents
Peace isn’t the outcome of your atrocious absolutism, no
If it’s only the peaceful who ought to endure your tyranny
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| badarnikt |
Posted
on 25-May-04 10:41 PM
Nice one soleil
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| Rosie |
Posted
on 26-May-04 07:18 AM
Absolument fantastique, Soliel! Vous devez le publier. Peut-etre, les politicians Nepalais vous ecouteront.
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| SITARA |
Posted
on 26-May-04 09:20 AM
I don't want FREEDOM, IF it means I'm bound by paranoid VIGILANCE!
Wah wah! Soliel, after a looooooooong we get a glimpse of a raging sun! :)
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| SITARA |
Posted
on 26-May-04 09:22 AM
time*
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| monika |
Posted
on 26-May-04 10:56 AM
fantabulous!!!!:).....keep it up.......but watch out for some people over here who might accuse u of using 'bombastic' english !!!!:P
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| KALANKISTHAN |
Posted
on 26-May-04 11:53 AM
Oye balle balle, Shabba shabba!! Sadke jaawaaaaaaaaaa!!!
Oye Praaaji, Chak-de-Phatte!!
O pappye, mai kiyaaa, tainu saari poet-aan di watt laa di! Hilla ke rak diyaan, rab di kassam!! Main kiyaa sarson da saag hur makke di roti bich itna power?? hehe.. mainu paaaji poem di poem paaye jaa ryaa hai? eheh... I should start eating makke di roti aur sarson da saag.. eheh..
First I thought it was another cut and paste of lyrics hehe.. you know.. something like "I don't want your freedom, I don't want to play around" kinda stuff, but pappye, from second line, you hit pure sixer.. oye balle balle!!
Awesome soliel, Arko ni jaawosh bro.... ;) How about tunin' this up and playin' it in your guitar?? lol...
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| LadyBug |
Posted
on 26-May-04 01:30 PM
Amen to Rosie.......again!
Soleil,
I feel like setting you up with my sista. you sound incredible. keep it up! keep it goin'
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| LadyBug |
Posted
on 26-May-04 01:32 PM
Disclaimer - i assume Soleil to be a male name...... pardon moi if i turn out to be mistaken.
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| Poonte |
Posted
on 26-May-04 04:20 PM
Impeccable depiction of an irony that hundreds of millions of people live with around the world. Be it in Nepal, or in the Middle East, or in Africa, it is the people who are utterly destitute and helpless that are, in the name of freedom, again and again, forced to endure just another form of tyranny! Repeated deceitful promises of freedom and prosperity have only brought nothing but more destitution, poverty and misery, in all shapes and forms, to the helpless -- sometimes naive -- citizens.
Bravo!! Encore, mon ami Soleil, encore!
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| hamisabai |
Posted
on 26-May-04 05:43 PM
Freedom Booster.
soleil,
Hail to the almighty.vigilante
Hail to thine Losangeles Freedom
Hail to thine heterosexualism
Hail to thine hypocrisy
i'm happy in my own deceitful,pitiful hole....whatever stimulates..
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| Soleil |
Posted
on 27-May-04 06:28 PM
Thanks guys for your appreciation and support.
Rosie, thanks for your suggestion to publish it, but don't I need a connection to do so?:P hehe just kidding.
Lady Bug, your assumption is 100% accurate. This Soleil is indeed a male ;). And I am flattered by your compliments towards me. Ooh hoo! I sound incredible. So far for setting me up with your sista, is she as remarkable as you are? :P About myself, maybe Sitala dyu could answer that. Sitala dyu, am I incredible?:P
Thanks Monika for your concern. Prolly it's time for them nincompoops to buy a nice thesaurus. ;)
Kalanki bro, I've got the chords and the lead all composed to croon a tune for. Are you up to vocalize it? Or should I ask Poonte to wail it the "gayine eshtyaal"? Ryaain ryaain ryaain?:P And Poo, where art thou?
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| confused |
Posted
on 27-May-04 10:22 PM
HOINA WHAT A POEM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
MAANN..WHAT A POEMMM..DANNG
"If being free is to be enslaved by your hypocrisies
Despotism and bureaucracy isn’t the law and order, no
If it’s only the powerless who must obey "
baaaaaAAAAAAAAAAAAAm!!!!!!!!!! i dont WANT UR FREEDOM IF ITS ONLY THE POWERLESS WHO MUST OBEY!!!!!
BROO..ITS REALLY AN INCREDIBLE POEM...SLAM THIS POEM ON THEIR FACE, THOSE SO CALLED GREAT POLITICIANS....... FROM DR. BABU RAM BHATTARAI TO GEROGE BUSH...
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| LadyBug |
Posted
on 28-May-04 02:39 PM
Heheh ..
Umm, dear Soleil,
when i say incredible, trust me, it might be incredible!
no second opinion needed esp that of sitala dyu.
or at least i dont need that person's in particular -
lets just leave at that.
and monika - -why in the mood to start the catfight with dear sonika again?
she is in paradise. leave her there.
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| LadyBug |
Posted
on 28-May-04 02:41 PM
it might be = it mighty well be!
forgot to add: have a GREAAAAAAAAAAAT weekend everyone. i know i will with my sista. :) joy of sistahood............that too is incredible! true sistas would know, ya?
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| monika |
Posted
on 29-May-04 12:07 AM
lol ladybug.......when did i take sonika's name????stop being defensive all the time .Take a chill pill !!!:P
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| SITARA |
Posted
on 29-May-04 06:33 AM
Soleil, the incredibly bombastic hulk, with a dazzling smile? ;) What an answer babey, you credibility lies with moi???.... well , now I am flattered! :) Let's hope the one in question has more credibility than those that crawl out from under rocks! hehe!
Monika, Soliel uses super-bombastic words, people might need both a dictionary as well as a thesaurus! ;)
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| SITARA |
Posted
on 29-May-04 06:34 AM
your*
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| KaLaNkIsThAn |
Posted
on 29-May-04 06:58 AM
And when Soliel uses those "boombastic" chords while he plays his six-strings, even Nepali Richie Samboras ask for a glass of water, hehe.. and a pack of gaida churot and Kleenex.
phew!!! Soliel bru, I am up for it... no no, don't let Poonte dai sing that!!! :P Aba tyo ryaai ryaai hanne budha lai ke thaa how to vocalize a song... grrr!! hehehe.. budha lai tyahi ryaai ryaai thik cha!! :P
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| Soleil |
Posted
on 29-May-04 12:15 PM
Dear friends, I have a plead to make. If you cannot love another being, doesn't mean you have to hate him/her. If you cannot disagree with someone else's opinion, doesn't mean you have to slander him/her. If you're not the part of the solution, then you are the part of the problem. Let's give peace a chance!!!
Ladybug, I do take your compliments. Besides, I absolutely had no idea you have such vexation towards Sitara.
Monika, forgive and forget their ignorance, for they don't know. If you know what I mean:). And, thanks again.
Sitala dyu, wondering a dictionary, and a thesaurus would be helpful describing the semantics and the metaphor used, that the reader can apprehend? hehehe;)
Folk, have a great weekend!!!!!
PEACE!!!
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| Soleil |
Posted
on 29-May-04 12:16 PM
Folks****
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| chubby_cheeks |
Posted
on 29-May-04 12:20 PM
ehehhehe...soleil....heyyyyy!:D...shhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
~`CC`~
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| Nepe |
Posted
on 29-May-04 07:42 PM
A superb poem !
Beautifully rhythmic (stuff very rarely found in modern prose-poetry), meticulously detailed (against blanket condemnation), each point presented with a razor sharp reasoning (stuff again rarely expected in poetry) and overall a captivating rebellion against hypocrisy and chicanery.
Yet I feel this poem is only half-finished. This is only 'what I don't want' part. Now, the next 'what I want' part would make it a complete declaration of the bold and meticulous.
That will be really wonderful, Soleil.
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| Nepe |
Posted
on 29-May-04 07:47 PM
*of the bold and the meticulous*
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| LadyBug |
Posted
on 02-Jun-04 08:59 AM
dear Soleil,
you have a very valid point to make. you go brother!
about the vexation part - i found out one thing: when u loose respect for a sista or any brotha for that matter, its really hard to have things normal again, i just hope i dont cross the slammin' slandering folks' path EVER. however as omnipresent as i am, it might be hard for them to avoid me....you are smart, i am sure you got the point. :)
they will find me in sajha, under the rock, on flowers, everywhere - you name it.
monika dear - like i said, true sistas would know the joy of sisterhood - so you would not.
how pitiful, even though deceiving names could make one assume you could be sonika's sis. never mind girlie.......go your own way, i was just asking you to leave her and her vocabulary ALone, i mean undisturbed. you could do that much easy can't ya?
phew....these people with "super-bombastic" words and attitudes, what's up with'em?
by the way - you must know about the chill pill as you are prolly prescribed to take it, i dont' need to!
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| Sonika_NY |
Posted
on 02-Jun-04 06:41 PM
Ladybug How're you doing girlfriend? I was so busy with parties and exclusive dinners that I ignored low life people here. Thats right , leave me way of life alone and you all get life
**************
Monika stop spying me.
*****
The poem its bombasting and I don't find a thing to admire it
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| redstone |
Posted
on 02-Jun-04 09:45 PM
well, then from my side i tell you this! if you can't appreciate others work, don't comment on it. you said "The poem its bombasting and I don't find a thing to admire it."
Can't admire it? well ill tell you this! admire your face as long as you can, coz i see you anytime, imma mess it up! there is a limit you can go, don't cross it!
waaa...cry about it, and say my hunk will come in porsche in my place and beat me up! YEAH. RIGHT!
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| wateva |
Posted
on 03-Jun-04 12:40 PM
woooohoooooooooooooo... didn't know you could write...:O can you believe it I didn't need a dictionary or a thesaurus...balle balle balle!!! :D ...
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| isolated freak |
Posted
on 03-Jun-04 12:47 PM
Poonte bro, tyasaile ta ma bahnchu ni, democracy doesn't work everywhere...heavily influenced by kaplan and Chua (the World on Fire).
Anyways, soleli bro, good poem although I am not good at udnerstanding poems.. this one was pretty easy to udnersatnd.. of course with the help of dictionary.com.
:-)
Jiskako yaar... narisa na..
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| Sonika_NY |
Posted
on 03-Jun-04 05:46 PM
Red stone get life, will you. low life stupid
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