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| Gandhi |
Posted
on 22-May-02 01:11 AM
Comments welcome....
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| bagmati1 |
Posted
on 22-May-02 01:14 AM
superb ! keep it up !!!
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| HahooGuru |
Posted
on 22-May-02 01:31 AM
Mitra Gandhi,
Katai timro gauko Maobadi ko naam AKASH nai ta hoina?
Tyo Army ko list ek Akash bhete thiye maile ta.
Katai uhi Akash le timri gau ki hatta katta bolne ... tini
lai tappa tipi lageko ta hoina?
J hos kabita superb chha hamro ankha ma tara
Akash walla harule ta yaslai Pratikribadi Kabita ta
bhanne nai chhan. Who cares?
Keep it up.
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| ashu |
Posted
on 22-May-02 02:15 AM
Gandhi-ji,
Visually, very pleasing to read.
Ramro lagyo, content-wise and re: the juxtaposition of two lives.
Aru kabita pani post garnu.hola
oohi
ashu
ktm,nepal
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| amish |
Posted
on 22-May-02 03:49 AM
superb!!
Gandhi_ji,
it's great to read a poem like you have written but at the same time it's so sad to read a poem like that 'cuz as always truth really hurts! your poem describing how people can get into those circumstances is such a real one that even i, living in a city, got aashu in my eyes while reading it....simply superb! if you ever publish a poetry book, i will be surely lining up to buy one.
keep on writing Ghandhi_ji and be blessed!
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| suna |
Posted
on 22-May-02 08:18 AM
Gandhi
It was a pleasure reading your poem. Please keep it up.
But, as you said comments are welcome:
I was a bit disappointed though with the idea that Tara was portrayed as the one who was in deeper trouble.
Had you been a woman, maybe your ideas would have been different. Achano ko peer khukuri ley k jandacha! Personally, many women would rather be Tara than be mahili. :)
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| Gorkhey |
Posted
on 22-May-02 08:38 AM
Yes, I do agree with Suna.
Gandhi, niice poem but ... here is my comment.
"Mailiko khabar sunepachhi..............................ghar paichha ". Yo haraf chahi upyukta dekhindaina.Yo haraf nikailidie ramro. Hamra bechieka cheli beti pir ko muhan yasari sajilai kabitama dhaler ramro tarikale bhhannu chahi thik hoina.
Mero tarka matra ho.
rest I leave it to you.
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| Sangam |
Posted
on 22-May-02 08:54 AM
Gandhi,
Good one!
More! More!
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