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| paramendra |
Posted
on 20-Aug-02 10:25 PM
Haikus/Muktakts/Poems/Short Stories/Articles
I hope this thread will be used for the above. Please send your private commentaries over e-mail. Only post literary pieces along this thread please. Unless your commentaries are int one of the forms listed above.
Haikus:
(1) 3 syllables in 1st line, 5 in second, 3 in 3rd, or
(2) 5, 7, 5
(3) There are a few other combinations, but I can not recall precisely what.
My haiku:
Meet 'em at
Sajha dot com and
Go mingle
Muktak:
Kathmandu bata ayeko gunaso
Chiya pasal, momo pasal bata
Tharee tharee ka table haroo
Ameriki restaurant haroo
Pashupatinath ko jaya hosh
Another haiku:
The mid-west corn fields
Straight roads, down from the great
Lakes. Chu-pul-doom. Hwas.
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| ebony_firefly |
Posted
on 21-Aug-02 11:35 AM
offering a tanka in this altar..
your bright smile
goes right within;
sound of wind
in the distant,emerges-
golden dune
BLAC_
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| ebony_firefly |
Posted
on 21-Aug-02 11:41 AM
offering a tanka in this altar..purified one! hehehe:P
your bright smile
goes right within;
sound of wind!
in the distant emerges-
golden dune
BLAC_
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| NK |
Posted
on 21-Aug-02 03:37 PM
oops Paramendra, Here you go! Are you going to review too? That would be nice :)
Posted on 08-21-02 11:23 AM
To Live
A new beginning.
It's a new day,
Air feels different,
And, arms are longer,
Legs jump higher,
Laughter exuberant!
It's a sparkling new life!
Outside the window,
all kaleidoscopic,
Swirling and red and blue and yellow.
In a numb silence,
only the whirring of a ceiling fan.
Heart jumps,
Tries to come out of the mouth,
Thudding gets louder,
the new day gets shriller,
Day progresses - a mad pace.
A mad, mad, mad place
To be.
A topsy turvey mad new day,
Even the new air has
a whiff of scandal,
Long arms aimless
dangles,
Legs desperate
to jump to crevices,
Or some iron tracks,
Laughter - a howl -
The New Day turns into a stench
of a three day old carcass.
A waste, a waste!
To be.
The thick diary lies,
Autobiography - fallacious,
Pages after pages
doctored and pretty and white
-washed.
Sorry, sorry.
Oh! The mad mad cry.
NK
First published in Suskera. Made some minor changes here. I like to post here for the frank comments/commentaries I receive. I learn a lot in the process.
I wonder what Sujan's interpretation will be. Kind of scared :)! And of course Gokul! I am apprehensive of Nattu's reaction though.... whatever. here it is.
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| deep |
Posted
on 21-Aug-02 04:03 PM
Night bus ma raajbiraj janda
kunai kunai mod ma hat samteki timile
man ma chhap ajhai chha
mugling ma bhat khandai herda
jhyakka jhukka timro najar prahar le
muti darfarayeko chhadai chha
Euta mitho nindra puryayera herda
bichodko dukha diyeko timro khali seat le
chot bhitra kataho ajhai chha
Badhai chha Lahan ma bhat hotel kholichheu
timi bhanda ni deceiving timro khana re chha
for the old times sake, *staff khana* ta dinuparne ni
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| paramendra |
Posted
on 21-Aug-02 04:11 PM
Grocery list, card
Goodwill clothes, brand names, Gap, Ni'
Weekend shopping trip
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| jayahos |
Posted
on 21-Aug-02 05:35 PM
Heaven and Hell
'Oh! My beloved devotee
What thou art looking for,' asked the god .
Bowed the tyro and murmured;
'Amongst thy creation, Oh God;
where the Heaven is?'
'It was the one' pointed
The god to the earth.
Mesmerized, asked he again;
'Where the Hel is then!'
'It hath turned one', replied the god;
Pointing yet again to the earth.
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| paramendra |
Posted
on 21-Aug-02 06:16 PM
Shake hands, smooch some
Floating in cyberspace
La-ra-la-ra-la
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| dirk |
Posted
on 22-Aug-02 07:41 AM
took the red-eye back
new semester, new friends and new chicks
but too many bills to pay
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| Ebony_firefly |
Posted
on 22-Aug-02 10:06 AM
Silent evening
yellow leaf cascades,
a rippled pond
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| dirk |
Posted
on 22-Aug-02 10:09 AM
Aisi apni Wife ho.........
5'7" jiski height ho, Jeans jiski tight ho,
Chehra jiska bright ho, Weight mein thori light Ho,
Umer mein difference slight ho,
Thori see wo quiet ho, Tu memorable her ek night ho~
Sadak per sab kahe: kya cute ho,
Bhid me sab kahe: side ho, side ho,
Nepal ki paidaish ho,
Saas ki khidmat jiski khwahish ho
Beauty multiply by Twice ho,
Ma Baap ki choice ho,
Padosi jab baat kare tu, haath me uskay knife ho.
Dinner candle light ho, Tu Delicious har ek Bite ho,
Dono mein na kabhi fight ho, Milne k baad dil delight ho..
Ankhain uski jaisay...sunny Twilight ho!
Honton ko dekh ker lagay...bahoot excite ho
Jab saari pehn k niklay tu kya sight ho,
Aisa lagay jaisay switzerland ki flight ho,
Favorite color white ho, make-up thora light ho
Zulfain Dynamite hoon.. Basant mein jaisay ur rahi koi kite ho !
Yeh kavita padhke sab kahe "uzair" tum right ho",
Kaash yeh concept .0001% right ho, agar aisi apni wife ho
tu kya haseen life ho Batoon mein garmaish ho
har kisi ki yahi farmaish ho kudrat ki bhi aazmaish ho
khudah ke software mein bhi, bug ki na gunjaish ho.
Defense ki rehaaish ho, Kise ki bhi na look-a-like ho,
aey kaash, kahin to ek aisi paidaish ho
Aisi apni wife ho
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| paramendra |
Posted
on 22-Aug-02 11:00 AM
Dil kee baat hai
Kis se kahein, sunein wo
Jinhein dard ho
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| Ebony_firefly |
Posted
on 22-Aug-02 12:07 PM
in a rat race-
its imprisoned moon
raindrops.
battered clothes,bare feet;
still smiling
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| she-reader |
Posted
on 22-Aug-02 12:49 PM
Tum ek marshya hey kee kya? Nonetheless, its good.
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| she-reader |
Posted
on 22-Aug-02 12:54 PM
continued.
that was meant for Mr. Dirk in response to the shayeree.. Thought clicking 'reply' would address you directly? anyhoo..
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| dirk |
Posted
on 23-Aug-02 07:48 AM
She-reader.....Tum ek jyapuni he ke kya...thanks though
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| dirk |
Posted
on 23-Aug-02 08:02 AM
1. Bewafa sanam se toh cigarette achi hai,
Dil jalati hai, par honto se to lagti hai
2. Woh bewafa hai to kiya,
mut bura kaho usko,
Ke jo hua sau hua,
khush rakhay khuda usko.
3. Woh dil hi kiya tere milnay ki jo dua na kare
Main tuj ko bhool kar zinda rahoon, Khuda na kare
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| CopyWrong Buster |
Posted
on 23-Aug-02 08:25 AM
Dirk,
Are these your own muktaks and shayeries? If not do mention where you're getting them from.
REF: Yeh kavita padhke sab kahe "uzair" tum right ho"
or are you Uzair?
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| she-reader |
Posted
on 23-Aug-02 12:53 PM
Dirk,
You're so busted :)
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| dirk |
Posted
on 23-Aug-02 01:14 PM
uzair=dirk in urdu, janaab!
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| sexpeare |
Posted
on 23-Aug-02 01:36 PM
1
fateko cholo
makhamal ko talo
phuskeko kattu janai ko palo.
2
lethal cocktail
prozac n viagra
garnished with hedonism
3
ashes to ashes
dust to dust
live a li'l b4 it goes bust.
no3.haiku is not mine but all the computer anoraks here need to read that bottom line is don't be an other 'mouse potato'.
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| RW |
Posted
on 23-Aug-02 02:21 PM
You all talked about haikus/poems
How about rhymes?
Can I bite some rhymes once at a time?
Is it a crime?
I ain't giving a dime
Either you stab me from behind
Or be kind not to mind
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| ;) |
Posted
on 23-Aug-02 03:01 PM
wah wah @ dirk... urdu ki jankaari ki daad deni padeki... by the way goodluck with waisi wife... agle janam me mili to sajha.com mein post karna mat bhoolna :P... and I do hope that was your original... IT was funny!
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| jira |
Posted
on 23-Aug-02 03:10 PM
evening trip
--------------
Flickering tube
in the window
Wet tires hum
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| Nepe |
Posted
on 23-Aug-02 04:19 PM
Allrite, here is an old ghazal of mine. I had compiled it in 2045 saal tira. The first four sher are original. The fifth one I added just now for a humorous note, or perhaps to show my maturity.
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