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| LamjungKunchha |
Posted
on 21-Aug-02 11:58 AM
Comments are welcomed
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| rusty |
Posted
on 21-Aug-02 01:06 PM
Well done! I thank you for not writing in Nepali-English script. It’s more readable. I really liked first three paragraphs, but I didn’t explicitly get what you’re conveying from your poem? According to my interpretation, you are sarcastically thanking Maoists for frightening Nepalese people and compelling them to leave the country. How did you get the idea that family planning corp.’s dream have come true when there is no significant cut back in population growth? In fact, their goal is to control the births, not to manage the existing population. As you mentioned, villages are getting emptied, which might be true. But, cities are getting over-populated instead. Let’s not talk about pollution/ contamination. Flee of couple of besmirched people doesn’t mean the whole city has become empty. Dude, maybe you need some modification in your poem….
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| LamjungKunchha |
Posted
on 21-Aug-02 01:17 PM
Rusty,
Thanks for your opinion. I wanted the comments like that. You probably right I might have exaggarated the number of people running away from the city. As we read news about people staying at India or wherever they are to avoid being arrested for corruption, it was my frustration that I wanted to express for letting these people run away while forcing the villagers to flee.
Hope this explains it little bit.
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| bisun |
Posted
on 21-Aug-02 02:21 PM
I think exaggerations are fine in literary work. They serve their puropse. Exaggerating some events makes it stick out and noticiable to readers/viewers. Caricature would be a good analogy.
However, as I read "rusty," his problem is not with your exaggeration, but rather than misinterpreting the dream of family planning officials or enthusiasts. Controling the current population is not their aim, but managing the future population by controling the birthrate is. Having less population only postpones the point (in time) of overpopulation; it doesn't eliminate it.
Over all, I liked your poem. After all, a poet doesn't have to be a scientist or a logician, but it helps if u can.
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| bisun |
Posted
on 21-Aug-02 02:26 PM
I notice a few grammatical errors in my above posting. I won't point to any, except one which becomes an obstacle to my conveying of meaning. So read the "than" in the first sentence of the second paragraph as "with."
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| LamjungKunchha |
Posted
on 21-Aug-02 02:30 PM
Thanks Bisun, I was being little sarcistic when I mentioned of population and environment control. For a long time, Family planning is trying to lower the population growth but they do not have success and I was satirically depicting their not yet fulfilled cause and attributing to that to the primeminister and the maoists with this success.
Hope it clears the confusion.
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