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| Rekha |
Posted
on 02-Sep-02 09:24 PM
His name was Roman. He has a house near Maitidevi Mandir (Ratopul dekhi Maitidevi ko galli jada mandir najik). A 3 story white colored house which is only about 5 minutes away from my house coz I lived in Ratopul. I use to see him walking around Maitidevi, Ratopul, Dhobikhola area all the time. He was attending Trichand College at that time and I was going to Gurkha Memorial Boarding High school in Satdobato, Lalitpur. I have liked him ever since I can remember.
I use to go to Maitidevi Mandir 2 or 3 times a day with my best friend Uma just to see his handsome face.
Everytime i saw him I would get butterfly in my stomach and my whole body would go num. He use to sit
on Chiya ko dokan and tease me everytime he saw me. I didn’t mind at all, infact I liked it . Uma knew
that I liked him so everytime he teased me she would pretend to get mad and yell at him and his friends.
We would laugh/giggle and walk away.
Dashain ko time thiyo. Ma, Uma, Aunty (Uma ko aama), Sami, Sarmila ani Sarita didi harek din bihana 3 baje puja garnu Maitidevi Mandir janthiyau. Line ekdam mai lamo hunthiyo tyestai le puja garnu bihana ko 3 baje dekhi 9-10 baje samma line ma parkhinu parthiyo. Roman use to come to Mandir around 5 am everyday. He use to sit down and just watch me standing on line for hours and hours until I was done with my Puja. Usley malai herthiyo ani jaba maile uslai herthiye usley na dekheko jasto garthiyo. Jaba ma puja sakera janu lageko huntiye Roman chiya ko dokan ma basera ra malai heri rahathiyo. On and off, Roman ra mero aankha ladi nai rakthiyo. Yesai gari Dashain ko Pahilo din dekhi Dashain ko tika laune din samma hamro bhet bhayo.
Roman knew when I lived. Roman mero tol (Ratopul) ma aaiyera mero ghar ko najik hidi rahan thiyo. Ma chahi ghar ko aagan ma basera Uma sanga Roman lie bahira herthiye. Uma ra ma jaile pani bahana banayera Maitidevi Mandir janthiyeu. Kahile titaura (pau) kinne bhanera, kahile Maitidevi chok bata mithai kinne bhanera, kahile dhago, kahile kay kahile kay kinne bhanera janthiyeu. Kahile daddy le janu na dida kheri puja garchu banera janthiyeu. I use to see him atleast 2 or 3 times a day.
I was very close to Anish Dai (one of Roman’s best friend). Anish dai and Roman were Maitidevi ko Dada. They use to boss around little kids and get into fights with Shiphal guys. Anish dai and Roman had a big gang of guys and they were seniors. Anish dai knew that I liked one of his friend so he kept asking me who I liked but I never had guts to tell him the truth. Maan ma ta lagthiyo ni bhanchu bhanera tara jaile pani Anish dai lie dekhe pachi aat nai na aaune.
Tihar ko time thiyo. Lakshmi Puja ko din Sami (mero saathi) ra ma Maitidevi Mandir gayau. It was around 7:00 p.m Jaha heray pani keta, keti haru bhaili kheldai thiyo. I was walking with Sami and we were really close to Mandir when all of a sudden someone grabed me and took me to this dark place. I started screaming. He put his hand on top of my mouth so I would stop screaming. I was getting really really scared because I could not see who it was.
I heard “Sis, kay bhayo??? Kina karayeko???” He took his hand out of my mouth.
I said “Anish dai ho???” He said “ Ho ho, ma Anish ho”.
We walked to this little corner where there was a little street light.
I said “ Kina daju kay bhayo???”
Anish dai look at me and said “ Maile jaile timi lie sodhe pani timi lie ko maan parcha bhan dainau tara aaja ta jasari bhaye pani timi lie bhannu parcha. Daju le bhaneko kura aaja ta mana”.
I said “Anish dai kay bhayo aaja pura sodyak (rakshi) khayera, kay ho yesto taal???”. Trying to aviod answering him.
Anish dai “Hoina hoina mero kura choda, aaja jasari bhaye pani malai bhana ta”.
I said “La bhanchu tara Promise garnu koslie pani na bhanne bhanera”.
Anish dai “ La la Promise, Ma kaslie pani bhandina”.
I said “ Anish dai, ma joslie maan parau chu tyo tapai ko best friend ho”.
Anish dai” Kay re??? Mero best friend ho ani malai aahile samma na bhaneko”. Ko ho bhana ta sis”.
I said “Usko naam”. Then I paused for a minute not I was very scared.
Anish dai “ La la malai taha bhayo ko ho bhanera. Roman ho hai???”.
I just look at him, gave him a smile and tried to walk away.
Anish dai “ La hida, Roman chiya ko dokan ma sodyak (rakshi) didai chha, gayera uslai bhana.
My jaws dropped down, I stared at him and said “ Kay ho daju malai marnu maan chha ki kyaho Laxmi
Puja ko din? Bho bho aaja hoina kunai din bhanchu.”
He just look at me, smiled, grabed my hand and started walking. I was getting so nervous. I didn’t know what Roman would say when he finds out that I like him. I wanted to run away but Anish dai was holding my hand so tight. We walked back to the street where I met Anish dai. By the time we got there Sami was gone. She didn’t wait for me.
CONTINUED .......................
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| DWI |
Posted
on 02-Sep-02 09:35 PM
Ghetto love story, always enticing.
Rekindles the supressed desires, once again every time.
Keep posting, the climax has just begun.
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| villageVoice |
Posted
on 02-Sep-02 11:01 PM
Good stuff. Sounds so real to me. What happened next?
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| suna |
Posted
on 03-Sep-02 12:21 PM
VV!!
:)
Am holding my breath too.
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| Ebony_firefly |
Posted
on 03-Sep-02 12:34 PM
ahahahahahahahaha....ooooooooooooooooooooohohohoho.
o dude,u cracked me up.nice humour
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| Ebony_firefly |
Posted
on 03-Sep-02 12:37 PM
uppppppppppppps! so sorry! it was meant for another thread..
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| ramon ko dushman |
Posted
on 03-Sep-02 06:17 PM
hey rekha
maybe u're a wonderful gal but what has gotten into your head that u think ramon is a goodlooking guy. He is a druggie, ugly, alchoholic and most of all.. my biggest enemy. there is a long story between him and I (even longer than your love story). let me clear some of the things here. There was no fight between him and "shifal ko guys". "Shifal ko guys always used to beat the crap of him and we ( chabel ko javaan) helped "shifal ko guys" cause they wanted us to help them. yeah you can say that he had a big gang but that includes all the stray dogs of maitidevi and all the druggies from all over kathmandu and dharan who would rob women who came to the temple to worship. I and five of my friends went to the temple to get ramon and his gang ( they used to sit around the tabletennis board behind the temple) ; they were nowhere to be seen. We even went to his house but his lettle sister told us that he wasn't there. I f you ever talk to him please let him know that his old enemy from chabel hasn't forgotten him and eventhough he managed to hide away from me while I was there, he won't be alble to hide from me when I go back to Nepal to visit.
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| euta thito |
Posted
on 03-Sep-02 06:56 PM
I remember that bustard. I always passed Maiti Devi when I returned home from school . That bustard would always ask me for money. What could I do? I had to concede since I was only 13 yrs old. Even when I had dui Rupiya or tin Rupiya on me, he would still be taking it. I remember that big grin on his ugly face that would so suddenly appear when he snatched things away from lil kids like me. And mind you, I was not the only one bullied by him; he would pick on a wide array of kids, all helpless because of not being physically strong, and also because of their tender age. Why people function that way, I do not know, but it certainly has to do with their insecurities about themselves, and with how they were raised. Maybe they were bullied when they were kids? Maybe that's how they vent their frustrations? I do not know the exact answer; the human brain is complex, as it is. If he were in the US, I would be bringing him to Jenny Jones on one of the shows that goes, "You used to bully me, but look at me now and look at your ugly druggie self". Everybody would be booing at him, and I would be pointing at him and laughing. Yeah, that's my dream. I hope my dream gets fulfilled some day.
On second thought, never mind my dream, for he most probably is lying face down somewhere in the streets of KTM with putrid smell of booze oozing out of his big mouth, polluting the entire neighborhood. People like him are incorrigible, and it's best to leave them that way. Let's just hope that someone slaps, some senses into his thick head. Or has he already changed? Maybe he has turned out to be a gentleman?
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| villageVoice |
Posted
on 03-Sep-02 08:56 PM
all the more credit to "rekha" for humanizing this bad guy then. deshbhakti ta mardaina garibdesh bhaye pani, patibrata ta mordaina chuthai pati bhaye pani (not sure if i got it right?).
rekha, what's next?
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| Keti |
Posted
on 03-Sep-02 09:11 PM
Rekha,
Do u know tripti from ratopul?
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| Rekha |
Posted
on 03-Sep-02 10:32 PM
I know what you guys are saying but I think you have heard a phrase
LOVE IS BLIND, well in my case it was blind. Everyone know how's Roman
and his gangs are but it's just a story so please don't take it so seriously.
Why don't I finish the story first then you can say or do what ever you want
to and oh ya ROMAN KO DUSHMAN JI, I have not talked or seen ROMAN
for over 6 years.
This story is pretty long. It might take a week for me to finish typing. I would love to get comments from you guys when I get done with my story. For now here is the second part of the story...........
We walked to the store where Roman was drinking with his friend.
Anish dai said “A Roman yeta aau ta, Reshma le kehi bhanchu re timi lie”.
Roman was so drunk, he could not even stand up. Anish dai walked up to him. Grabed him and dragged him out where I was standing. Anish dai was holding Roman and we walked over to the Maitidevi Mandir. We stopped by the gate and Anisha dai told Roman to be nice to be and we walked over to another store which was only couple of feet way and sat there with his friends. I was all alone with Roman and there was not much light. I could see his figure but could not see his face clear. I was so scared that I started
so shake.
Roman said “Anish le bhaneko timi le malai kehi bhannu chha re, Kay ko tyo kura???”
I said “Roman tapai lie taha nai chha maile kay bhannu lageko bhanera, Hos bhandina”.
Roman said “Taha chha tara pani timro mukh bata sunnu maan lageko chha”.
I said “Taha bhayeko kura kay bhannu ta, la ma janchu”.
Roman said “ Hoina hoina please na jau na. Please Reshma bhana ta”.
I said “Tapai lie taha chha ma tapai lie maan parau chu bhanera.Tapai lie taha chha I’m in love with you”.
Roman looked at me and gave me a big smile and said “ Timi lie taha chaina hola tara I love you too.”
Then he gave me a hug. I felt so releaved and happy. Anish dai came over and looked at both of us and said “La la khushi chhu ma aaja, mero sis lie Roman ani Roman lie mero sis payo”. We both looked at Anish dai and smiled. Anish dai could see the smile on my face and see how happy I was with Roman.
It was getting late. I told Anish dai that I had to go home but he said Roman is drunk and he can’t take care of himself so I sould stay with him for a while. He said if I was tired and getting sleepy just take
Roman and go to his house and spend a night there. I told him I couldn’t but he didn’t let me go home. We just sat there and talked. After couple of minutes Shudeep dai came (another best friend of Roman and Anish dai). I was also close to Shudeep dai. He saw me talking to Roman so he just smiled and started talking to Anish dai. The only thing Shudeep dai said was “La la thik chha, khushi chhu timro liago Reshma.”I knew that he knew I liked Roman.
All of us Me, Roman, Anish dai and Shudeep Dai walked to Dhobikhola. It was around 11:00 pm. We sat down in a cold store and started talking more. We drank some coke and fanta. We wallked back to Maitidevi Mandir but we took the long road which is from Maitidevi Chowk. Anish dai and Shudeep dai walked about 30 feet ahead of us. Me and Roman we just talking and walking slow. When we got back to
Maitidevi Mandir we heard that one of thier (Roman, Anish dai and Shudeep dai’s) friend was taken away by police (COPS). Roman started crying like a baby. Anish dai and Shudeep dai got very upset. We did not want to stay there so we started walking. It was getting really late (midnight). I had to go home because daddy was worried about me but I couldn’t leave Roman just like that.
I told them that I wanted to go to my aunty’s house which is in Bijay Chowk, Old Baneswor. So again Anish dai and Shudeep dai walked ahead of us. He holded my hand and we walked. SInce it was really cold and I was only wearing t-shirt, he took off his jacket and put it around me. It took us about 4 hours to get from Maitidevi Mandir to Old Baneswor. We were walking very very slow. Finally I got to my aunty’s
house. Lucky me everyone was awake. There was couple of kids singing DEUSHUI. So we all sat down until they got done. I said good bye to Anish dai and Shudeep. As I was walking to the house Roman came running, he gave me a hug and kissed me.It felt so good. I had been waiting for that moment all my life. I didn’t know what to do. I was so scared so I just gave his jacket back and gave him a kiss on his cheek and went inside.
It was so late. I walked inside the house and everyone was looking at me like I killed someone. I knew everyone was really mad at me. My aunts (kaki ani badhi) started screaming at me but I didn’t care because I was so happy. I just pretended like nothing happened and went to sleep. Daddy called me after couple of minutes and he started yelling at me. I told him I was with Anish dai and we had some trouble with cops. Daddy stopped yelling and told me that I should have called him earlier. I stayed at my aunty’s house (kaki) until Tihar was over but I went to see Roman everyday at Maitidevi Mandir.
ENJOY !!!
CONTINUED ...................
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| Rekha |
Posted
on 03-Sep-02 10:41 PM
Roman ko Dushman ji, I don't think I'm ever going to see Roman in my life again
because he is still back in KTM doing his own thing and I'm here studying in US.
But if I do I'll be sure to tell him that you KICK HIS ASS.
Euta thito I'm so sorry Roman treated you so bad. I am truly sorry.
Keti ji I don't think I know Tripti. Where in Ratopul did she live?
My house was right next to the galli that leads to Maitidevi Mandir.
Village ji, Thank's for the understanding.
I'll post some more tomarrow. Just read the whole thing when I get done and you'll understand what I'm trying to say.
Reshma :-)
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| Bhenda |
Posted
on 04-Sep-02 06:35 AM
I seriously think that if girls were allowed to mingle freely with boys they would not fall for creeps like Roman..
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| suna |
Posted
on 04-Sep-02 06:42 AM
Rekha: good reading, took me right back to my Prakash Kovidh days :).
Bhenda you can say that again...me thinks the same.
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| deep |
Posted
on 04-Sep-02 09:00 AM
Rekha/Reshma,
Raato pool, maiti devi, dashain time huh? I must have seen you many times then.
Do you know Chetana?
Well, Amar used to like C Thapa a lot but C Thapa was also friendly with this Maitidevi dude. ( Amar was from battisputali). Amar was trying hard to bring Cthapa in his armslock but that was not happening. So, one afternoon as Amar saw Cthapa speaking with that Maitidevi dude with a smile, he got mad and said, "I just don't understand...what the hell does this muso has and I don't....I gotta take care of this..."
Well, as long as I was there he (Amar) couldn't take care of that. The last time I saw Cthapa was when I waited for a while in Pashupati to ask for some chandan one saturday morning from her.
Old memories growing young. I enjoyed reading.
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| Ekalabya |
Posted
on 04-Sep-02 11:46 AM
Prem Pratigyaa ko madhuri Dixit ra Mithun jasto rahechha ni ta Love Story............
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| maya |
Posted
on 04-Sep-02 06:38 PM
Rekha ko love story sunera ta malai pani mero first love story sunau sunau lagyo. I'll wait until she get's done with her story.
Rekha, was that your first love? (if u'd allow me to call that thing "love")
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| u.d. |
Posted
on 04-Sep-02 09:41 PM
Strange as it seems, I did not find anything special about Rekha's story in spite of several readers praise. Apparently, the story seems to be based on a true story. In a nepali society, I wonder which dai (even if he is a cousin) will let his sister date a drunk. On top of that, he suggests her to go with this guy to his house and spend the night there..... (ma ta rukh bata khasen). And the father forgives the daughter instantly once she tells him that she was with "dai" even though she had disappeared at NIGHT for several hours. I also noticed that miss rekha was tryping to copy deep ji's writing style which didn't go too well and she dropped the idea. ani.. miss rekha, you might want to read what you have written before you post. Grammatical error is an issue. Good luck with your future writing.
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| rekha_ko_subachintak |
Posted
on 04-Sep-02 10:39 PM
Rekha ji,
I hope you won't get to be with roman because you will get hurt soon cuz he's a gunda. There's some chances that he won't break your heart but your heart will be broken eventually as he will die in early age cuz of the drugs and alcohol he took.
So, rekha ji please forget about that bastard and find somebody who will appreciate you.
tapai ko subachintak
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| broken_hearted |
Posted
on 04-Sep-02 11:15 PM
Amen bhanda !!!
I think its a good example of the idiom " good guys finish last"
creeps like roman take beautiful nepali girls' heart make them cry.
Rekha, whatever happened, happened. Think it as a mistake and try to forget about it.
I know it's easy to tell somebody to forget their lost love but hard to do. It takes time to bury your past but you will be fine. I did it and so will you. You shouldn't waste your time in his memories. Instead of writing this story you should concentrate in your studies. I'm sure that your classes already started (you mentioned that you're in college.)
I would have emcouraged you to write it if roman would appreciate it which he's not gonna do. So, stop hurting your fingers as well as your heart. Instead, find a decend guy who would appreciate you and who's not a creep like roman. There are plenty of nice nepali guys here in US ( I can recommend some if you want:)
good luck!!!
ps If you need any moral or emotional support, talk to Dr. dangggg. I'm sure doc will help you.
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| day |
Posted
on 04-Sep-02 11:25 PM
ya u.d.
I agree with you. Its obvious that Rekha's story is true as roman is a nutorious gunda from Maitidevi but she got some fictional twist in it. Either rekha lost some factual details in the story while trying to make it short or her family ( including her father and dai) were also gundas like roman.
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Posted
on 05-Sep-02 12:08 AM
Rekha,
I really like your "true" story. Please keep it coming and do not listen to personal critism, someone once told me that the lowest level of people talk personal.
I applaud you for sharing your story and you write very well. I am sure you know that by now.
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| Rekha |
Posted
on 05-Sep-02 12:14 AM
Maya Ji, I would love to hear your love story. Why don't you put it up??
Subha chintak ji, Thank's a lot for the support.
UD. Obiviously you don't knwo me and you don't know what happened but I would
like to thank you for all the comments you put down.
Broken Hearted. Thank's a lot. You really made me feel good about myself.
Day. Roman is a bully and of course druggie which everyone knows and that's
the fact. As for my dad and Anish dai. They are not bullies like Roman nor they
have been ever. My dad does love me and cares a lot about me but the fact is
he knows how I am and he trust me. He knows I he can count on me not to make
any bad judgements.
Reshma :-)
P.S UD come on I'm not trying to copy Deep Dai at all. I mean I love all his story
but specially the way he writes but I would never want to copy anyone. As for my
grammer, I know it's not good but I really don't have time to go through everything I typed in and correct my grammers because this story (One luv) is so long. I'm not even half way done. Anyway I think you got my point.
Deep Dai am I copying you ???
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| Rekha |
Posted
on 05-Sep-02 12:25 AM
Thank's to everyone who took their precious time to read my story.
I do take critism as well as I take my comments so once again, thank's
a lot everyone.
Here is some more ...................
Finally Tihar was over and I was going back home. Sanjay dada (kaki ko bhai) who is almost as same age as me was dropping me home. As I was walking home I had a feeling that daddy was going to kill me for not telling him what happened on Laxmi Puja. I was hoping god daddy would just forget about the whole thing. I told Sanjay dada that I had to go through Maitidevi Mandir because I have to buy something there. So we walked to mandir and I saw Roman. He looked dissapointed. I went home got changed and went back to Mandir. He was still there. I asked him what happened. He told me that I he was jealous because I was with another guys. It took me such a long time to convince him and tell him that Sanjay dada was just a friend and came to drop me home.
After that we saw each other everyday. Sometime even 5-10 times a day. I know it sounds crazy but I thought I was in luv with him. I never asked him how he felt about me. He was a lot older then I was so I guess I was really scared to talk to him about any feelings I had for him. We would always meet near Maitidevi Mandir, Chaur, Dhobikhola or somewhere near my house. My dad knew about Roman but what he didn’t know was I was dating him that time. My dad likes Anish dai a lot and it seemed like my dad started to like Roman also may be because he was Anish dai’s friend. Sometime I would come home late and my dad would ask me where I was. I would just tell him I was with Anish dai and he would let me go without saying anything. My dad seemed really COOL !!!
One days I went to Red Bridge Hotel with Nazma didi (my cousin). She had her friendz there. We just hung out and had fun the whole day. I met a friend of Nazu didi name Rupan. We became friendz. Me and Rupan hung out even if there was noone else around. We would always meet in Rad Bridge Hotel and hang out there in day to day bases. One days Nazu did told me that Rupan likes me. I was really surprised because Rupan had a girlfriend name Rabina and she was so much prettier then me. After talking to Nazu didi, I went to Red Brigde Hotel and met Rupan there. I asked him what he wanted from me. He said he wanted to be my boyfriend. I told him I had a boyfriend and his name was ROMAN. Rupan seemed so surprised and looked at me like I was talking like crazy. I tol him everything. When I was walking out of Red Bridge Hotel with Rupan I saw Roman. Roman seemed really mad. I ran after him and tried to ask him what had happened but he didn’t tell me. I went home crying.
It was Sharshwati Puja. I wokr up really early to go to Maitidevi Mandir. I woke my best friend UMA and made her go with me. It was about 6 am. First we went to Pashupati and I saw bunch of other guys from Maitidevi. I asked them where Roman was but noone had seen him for couple of days. I had not seen him myself either. I was getting really worried. After Pashupati Uma and I went to Maitidevi Mandir and started looking for Roman and Anish dai. I finally found Anish dai about 2 pm. I asked him where Roman was and he refused to tell me. I asked him so many times. He told me Roman was mad at me and he has been very upset for couple of days and had not felt the house. I stayed at Maitidevi Mandir the whole day. Around 5 pm Roman finally showed up. I ran up to him and hold his hand and asked him what happened to him. He said I was CHEATING ON HIM. I asked him what the hell he was talking about. He said he saw me with Rupan. I asked him how he knew Rupan. He told me that Rupan was his cousin. He also told me that Rupan had been telling everyone that I (Reshma) was dating him. I couldn’t believe what I was hearing.
CONTINUED ................
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| villageVoice |
Posted
on 05-Sep-02 07:24 AM
Rekha, as I said earlier, a very nice story indeed.
I like the way you introduce characters and events - very natural as if my own poor cousin (who by the way lives near Rato Pool) is half-talking and half-crying over her ill-fated love story. I'm going to call her soon, and I hope she's not in love with a similar character loafing about Maiti Devi Mandir, Sifal, Dhobi Khola, and Banehwor Chowk, though I like this Roman guy. And you, sure,...so blindly in love.
but pls start organizing your story. the way you are going, you will end up introducing too many characters to the story, even more than Talstoy in War and Peace (580-odd).
I hope you are not writing an epic. But never mind if you are. Just concerned that the story will fizzle out. Yes, I agree about a remark here (by suna?), you gotta do something about your grammar. Just as anepalikt (hope I got the attribution correct) told a fellow poster in another thread: if I care about grammar, it's simply because grammatically incorrect sentences are confusing.
Please slow down a bit, and re-read before you post. You will do a huge favor to a lot of readers and yourself. But, hey, all said in good faith. I just love your story.
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| villageVoice |
Posted
on 05-Sep-02 07:36 AM
The issue of grammar was raised by U.D. and not Suna. Just to set the record straight.
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| suna |
Posted
on 05-Sep-02 10:57 AM
:)
thanks VV. It couldn't have been me coz I post from work and far be it from me to check my own punctuations and grammar :).
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| Rekha |
Posted
on 05-Sep-02 12:21 PM
Hey guys,
I'm sorry so say this but I won't be abel to
finish the rest of the story because I don't
want you to waste your precious time reading
my crappy luv story which is true but everyone
seems to hate it. I just wanted to share my story
with you all but I think I'll just end it right here
right now. Thank's a lot to everyone for the
comments anyway.
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| deep |
Posted
on 05-Sep-02 12:29 PM
Rekha,
don't be discouraged!!
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| Gundaaraaj |
Posted
on 05-Sep-02 12:39 PM
I don't think rekha's love story has such a magical and thrilling effects upon the readers. It might be a true story indeed, but stories like this are in abundance everywhere from Dafaa 302, Manohar kahaniyaa like various tabloids. The plot, setting, themes, body etc, elements like that aren't proportionately distributed.
Anyways I do encourage her effort with good precision to convey a certain messege through her writing. Analytically speaking, the Protagonist in her story is Rekha, by herself, and the antagonist is obviously Roman. The writer whoever puts forth herself/himself as the leading protagonist in any fictional writing or even true story, is prone to lead the thoughts in a mismanaged judgement and can't justify the importance and existence of other characters . Rekha's persona is a beautiful, naive, well bred,emotional, or so to speak, a flawless character. Where as Roman is the destroyer of her world which was just full of peace and harmony. She has tried to put herself as a victim of a bad judgement in falling in love with Roman or let's say being infatuated towards him, a proximal attraction towards someone who is full of all the bad traits a society would like to confer on him. Contrary to the fact that Roman also likes her in the beginning, but she has failed to justify Roman's attraction towards her in breaking down his perceptions towards her. What he really wanted in Rekha? Why would he pursue a life of a vagabond, why was he so much into bullying his friends or juniors? There should have been some psychosocial factors in shaping his abnormal behaviour. A writer needs to go to the depth of finding subtle reasons in analysing any character's persona and acts. Rekha has missed this step in constructing the required element of Roman's molding into such kind of weird, jerky and a harrassing ways of socialising in the community. Any kind of animalistic or bestial character, like Iago in othello, has to be related in distance with some kind of pre-existing conditions. To interrelate such events in a sequential thoughts is at the heart of any story writing.
I , personally, do honor you Rekhaji, at least for the creativity that's flourishing inside your battered yet balanced stream of thoughts. Good luck in your forthcoming stories!!
A Gundaa
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| jira |
Posted
on 05-Sep-02 12:39 PM
"trange as it seems, I did not find anything special about Rekha's story in spite of several readers praise. I also noticed that miss rekha was trying to copy deep ji's writing style which didn't go too well "
UD! you hear me. A good writer always listen to the feedback no matter whether it is positive or negative and that is what the critics is for. It seems like she can not take it. I can visualize the flow of sentences with so many grammatical mistakes. UD, I can not agree with you more on that. Copying Deep ji's style..Hunn!! interesting observation. Expressing in Roman is as hard as writing in correct english. Even a tiny typo would let the story go nowhere. Hunee bhaye **** ko panee use hunthyo hola...Astericks bhunda yaad ayo..
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Friend: all right, what is my Password if you saw it?
Banta Singh: four asterisks! hee, hee.
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| bideshi |
Posted
on 05-Sep-02 03:31 PM
Rekha pls,complete ur story.Love to read such love stories.Just want to know how it ended.
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| danggg |
Posted
on 05-Sep-02 07:10 PM
guys 'n girls,
If you wanna read the ending of rekha's story visit the next thread. Story_teller has posted the final episode of Rekha's story.
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| Gazal |
Posted
on 05-Sep-02 09:29 PM
Hey Rekha
WOuld like to hear the rest of your story otherwise it would be compelled to think ....Rekha must have said...... Aru maanchey haru ley k k bhanyo k k bhanyo hosh Roman I won't continue the relationship with you anymore bhanera??
If you start something then you must end it accordingly Rekha naani :)
Eagerly waiting fro the rest......
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| maya |
Posted
on 05-Sep-02 10:01 PM
Rekha,
You had guts to start this story. Everyone enjoyed it. Guys have always tryied to nail down women. Don't give them this chance now. I'm with you. Please complete the story. You are not in Nepal so you don't have to worry about what others are saying or what they would say. You have been bold and don't let anyone's posting let you down. Just let it out and then you'll know how good you can write.
And please don't disappoint us by not telling us the end!
:)
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| maya |
Posted
on 05-Sep-02 10:17 PM
Gundaaraaj!
Not everyone falls in love logically or after reasoning a lot or for that matter even thinking. You just fall in love. It's that simple. Specially when you are in Nepal and a teenager. I can understand Rekha's feelings towards Roman and that's very typical of Nepali (specially Kathmandu) girls who don't get to mix with many guys but there is always one guy in the neighborhood who gives 'em the looks.
Rekha has started out writing in a decent way. She hardly mentions about the defects of Roman. It the other posters who have called Roman a druggie and an alcoholic(?). So the other posters have helped build this story and obviously it forms a negative image of Roman. He must be a spoilt brat in Maitidevi.
About writing details of how Roman became that Roman, I don't think it is necessary. We're not interesed in Roman's life story. It is Rekha's story. She will put the way she wants to bring out her old memories and she has got to be the leading character in the story.
Finally, I would still want Rekha a.k.a. Reshma to finish up her story so that I can get started on mine!
maya
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| sunnysideup |
Posted
on 06-Sep-02 04:10 AM
Rekha,
Please listen to what maya is saying.She deserves your ear... and people like gundaaraj and rest of so called literature pundits.. well they deserve your middle finger, sprinkled with a smile, ofcourse.
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Posted
on 06-Sep-02 01:42 PM
Rekha Ji,
I admire your courage and your desire to share your story, may be this will enlighten other girls like yourself not to fall for a guy like the one you did.
Regardless of what everyone says I recommend you to complete the story you started. I am always looking for the next episode.
Your story brings back memories and the thoughts and feelings of a teenager, when I was one.
Please, please complete the story.
The way you have laid; life in itself is a story, it is not going to end even after the life ends, the story will continue. In this light the work you started should be completed.
There will be many critics and fans. The amount of critics you are getting shows the amount of interest your story have generated. It also reveals the sucess of your story. Please continue writing. Please!!!!
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| ajju |
Posted
on 07-Sep-02 02:59 PM
seems like rekha is out of words or that she doenst have the time to continue her story.
so miss maya, i would like to request you to start your's now...thanks
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| maya1 |
Posted
on 07-Sep-02 08:36 PM
I tried to write my story. And I did write few paragraphs of it. Then I decided I shouldn't do this. It is going to be your waste of time because it will not provoke your thinking nor does it do any good to me. It is past and I cherish it in my heart. It is very special and I don't want to share it here.
Now I realise why Rekha stopped. It is because this story goes on for ever. I think Rekha and Roman didn't have any official relationship and they don't owe each other any explanation. So they didn'nt officially break up. In the story we read that a new guy was introduced. I forgot his name. Maybe Rekha started having feelings for him and later found another guy and so on until she left Nepal.
Now she has different people that she has feelings for. THis is very general among most of us. Where is the end of the story? THere isn't. Even if a couple is married, the story still goes on.......
These postings doesnt do us any good... just takes away our precious time. I am wasting my time writing this. There are only few threads here that is worth reading, thoght provoking. So readers and writers, don't read everything out here. And ifyou know you have something important to do, don't waste yourtime in gbnc forum. I finally realized this.
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| ajju |
Posted
on 07-Sep-02 11:29 PM
some people have hard time keeping up with their words.......kina hola
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| maya1 |
Posted
on 08-Sep-02 02:01 AM
Ajju,
Are you Ajay? I swear I tried to write. But I felt like it was never going to stop. The story of 5 years and still going (somewhat) is too long for me to write here. Sorry to disappoint you.
You can go ahead and write.....
maya
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| sunnysideup |
Posted
on 08-Sep-02 03:48 AM
maya ra rekha ko taal dekhera ...ke bhanne.. i'm really disappointed.
I wanna tell you something. All these people we read and about in Sajha, they are not real. It's only their image.In reality, they suck at most of the stuffs and are good at few, just like you and me and him or her.So, please please dont feel inferior.
F$%# 'em if they dont like it. Its your fundamental right to express yourself
and for all thosee s&^%heads who want to read a professionally written stories, go buy a book .
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| sunnysideup |
Posted
on 08-Sep-02 03:55 AM
.....want to read a professionally written stories =.... want to read professionally written stories.
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| ajju |
Posted
on 08-Sep-02 10:29 PM
you yourself had asked rekha not to disappoint the readers of her story while you were eagerly waitin for your turn.....so what happened, just because you saw some familiar name on the post u decided to change your mind......
you dont have to feel sorry cause i aint disappointed at all
just come up with yur story, i am sure i will love it along with other regular readers here at sajha.com.
just like sunnysideup earlier said make use of your fundamnetal rights..i.e to express yourself.
Happy "TIJ" to you and to all nepalese female all over the world
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| maya1 |
Posted
on 09-Sep-02 02:50 AM
la la... katha sunnu parya haina timiharu lai....la suna
ekdin usko ra mero aankha judyo college ma. aankha ta dherai sanga judya thiyo.... so i never thought anything more than that.... tara bistarai dherai nai aankha judna thalyo. Purposely i started going out of class to see if he'd be around and there he was waiting for me to come out of class. So we started exchanging little smiles. tettikai ma love paryo. we had some common friends so they helped us get hooked up. aafno ta duniya nai change bhaihalyo. tyo mero first time real love parya.... sano tino crush ta pari nai rahanthyo tara kasailai thaha hundaina thyo. yespali ko love bare sabailai thaha hundai gayo. i was so happy. i'd make excuses at home to go see him. I never really stayed out late. usanga bhetne time chain usually college mai hunthyo. ani college nabhako din phone ma kura hunthyo. bistarai bistarai college skip garera hami dui jana ghunma janthyoun. by this time we were just holding hands - not in front of people. ani ek din u ra ma matrai thiyoun, we were just talking nonsense (which was romantic then) and he held me around his arms. It felt good. He wanted something from me... i didn't ask what it was but i gave him a soft kiss on his cheeks. he did the same to me. that was my first kiss from a guy on the cheek.
la katha laamo huna thalisakyo.... ma important points matrai bhanera sakkaidunchu hai?
ani ekdin estai ghumira bela ma we were holding each other and he just stared at me for some time. When i was going to say something, he kissed on my lips. it was very unexpected and i didnt know really what to do...!!! i mean that was the first kiss on the lips and seriously i didnt know that nepali guys and girls actually kissed on their lips. it was a short kiss but was enough to make me want more.
i started to want him more.... there was no other reason except that he was a cute boy. we went out few times and to those quiet restaurants where no one would bother us.
like every coin has 2 sides, din chha ta raat chha..... mero khusi ko din haru pani bistarai bistarai dukhi huna thalyo.... sano sano kura ma jhagada ani feri nepal ko thita haru tyasai ta ho ni.... sarai thulo hunu parne. keti manche haru le bhau khojni, keta haru le na dine... ettikai ma distance badna thalyo... college pani chutti bhayo tyaspachi bhet ghat banda. ani nepal ko situaion nai tyastai. chahera pani bhet huna namilne. gharmai basera tadpinu parne.
college sakkaye pachi ma bidesh tira lagen....
maile details bhanina... its not good to say all that..... khas interesting story ta hoina... he was not a bad guy. Infact i am proud of him and myself. tara bhagya ma nabhaye pachi k garne. tara as far as i know he is haapy there where ever he is and i am too...
chitta bujhauna time lagyo, ani chitta bujhaune aru nai koi pani bhet bhayo.......
and as i said... the story goes on....
phew!
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| Rekha |
Posted
on 09-Sep-02 09:07 AM
Maya Ji,
Great story. I really liked it a lot. Short but very nicely done. My story is kind of same.
You'll know later on. Thank's a lot for the courage you gave me to finish my story.
Rekha :-)
P.S Hey guys I was not home for the whole weekend that's why I didn't have time to write more. Now I'm back I'll be sure to keep up with my stories and with your comments.
Thank you all for taking time and reading my story.
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| bideshi |
Posted
on 09-Sep-02 09:10 AM
hey rekha r u in CO?
I'm in CO too.
and complete ur story
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| Rekha |
Posted
on 09-Sep-02 09:11 AM
Here you go guys. Like I told you before it'll take a long time to finish the story so if I'm not keeping up then just let me know.
I got so pissed off. I started yelling at him in front of all his friends. Anish dai came and took me to the corner and asked me to leave because Roman was drunk at that time. I left without saying a word to Roman. Later that day around evening time (6:00pm) he came to my house. I was sitting in front of my house with Uma and her mom. As soon as I saw him, I left. Roman walked up to aunty (Uma?s mom) and had a talk with her. After few minutes aunty came into my room and ask me to go outside to have a talk with Roman. I was so mad. I asked aunty to go tell him that I didn?t want to see him anymore. After having a talk with aunty I went back to the front. He was standing there, talking to Uma.
I asked him why he was there and what he wanted. He asked if I could take a walk. We got out of the house and started walking towards Ratopul.
We walked to Ratopul and after that we went to Chaur without saying a word to one another. When we reached Chaur I saw rajdeep dai there with his other friends. I walked up to him and tired talking to him but he refused. I tired to ask him what was going on and why everyone was mad at me but no one would tell me. It seemed to be impossible.
Finally Rajdeep dai walked up to me, looked into my eyes and said " Reshma, timi mero bahini ho tara timi le jay gareu tyo thik hoina ra aaja dekhi malai daju na bhana". I was so surprised and didn?t know what to say. I just ran off as quick as I would, leaving Roman behind. He ran after me. He caught me after a while. We sat under a tree and started talking about what was going on. He told me that he was upset because I was hanging out with Rupan. He also said that Rupan got some guys from Shiphal to go to matidevi and start a fight. I didn?t know what was going on. I was so hurt by what Rajdeep dai had said. I started crying. Roman took me to Red Bridge Hotel. We sat there drinking a coffee. I was worried about my dad because he was not home all day and he had not called home. While Roman was drinking coffee I asked him if I could go and call my dad really quick. I walked out of Red Bridge Hotel and ran towards my house. When I got there, the lights were off and no on was home. I left a note for my dad at the door saying " Daddy, I?m with Roman right now and we are in Red Bridge Hotel. Rajdeep dai and I had an argument. Please come get me as soon as you get home". I ran back to RB Hotel. Roman was sitting there talking to the owner of the hotel which is Roman?s good friend. Roman, his friend and I just sat there talking. After 20 minutes daddy was there to get me. I was crying. Daddy asked me what had happened but I refused to tell him. I made Roman promise he would not tell me dad anything. Roman left for home. Daddy and I walked back to our house.
After that day Roman would come to see me everyday after his college. I would make lunch for daddy and myself. He would come and sometime have a lunch with us. My dad liked Roman a lot. One day Roman came over to see me. I told him that it was not good to see each other in the evening time and I would only meet him during day. He agreed to see me only during day time. Sometime when I really wanted to see him I would go to Maitidevi mandi with Uma and her mom. I knew it was safe to go with them because people would stop the rumors that was going around.
CONTINUED ...............
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| roman ko dusman |
Posted
on 09-Sep-02 07:52 PM
hey rekha
you never told us about how did your dad first find out about you and mero dusman are going out ( lub paryo bhanera). Please tell us about it next time you write. As much as I hate roman, I like your story.
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| Rekha, Maya1 are Lesbean |
Posted
on 09-Sep-02 08:01 PM
Hi! Yo yo.....
Rekha and Maya1 are lesbean. Stay away deude.
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| rekha |
Posted
on 10-Sep-02 09:08 AM
What the heck is your problem??
Where did you get the idea Me and Maya are lesbian.
Have some respect for others please.
Reshma :-)
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| Rekha |
Posted
on 10-Sep-02 12:16 PM
Bideshi ji,
IYes, I'm in Colorado. Happy to hear that you're in CO too.
Hopefully I'll see you around.
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| Smurf |
Posted
on 10-Sep-02 01:06 PM
Rekha,
Deducing from your writing style and online behavior, you sound like you are still in high school. Nothing wrong with that in itself. If that presupposition is right, you are probably... hmmm... 16 or 17 years old... right now. Am I correct?
Given the fact that you mentioned this "true" story occurred over 6 years ago, at that time, you were... what..10 years of age?
Wow !!! Girl, your pre-teen years were quite uniquely interesting indeed, to put it mildly.
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| jira |
Posted
on 10-Sep-02 02:00 PM
Sani makkai ko katha
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Ek deen ko kuro ho, makkai family ko phool uthney deen ayo. Phool uthna ko lagee
uniharu lai handee bhitra janu parthyo, tyo punee charko ago ma. Ba makkai, ama makkai
ra parewaar ka aunya thula mukkai haru ley a-aphna poka-puntura kasna thaley. Uta mukkai ki kanchee choree ley panee phool uthney icchya byakta guree. Ba makailey samjhayo, "Nani, teemro ahiley phool uthney bela bhayeko chaina, thulo bhaye puchee janu. Tyaha dherrai tato huncha, mato ko bhuima basnu parcha, kucho ko daanth ko godai khanu purcha, phool uthna dherrai garho cha", ba makailey ekkai saas ma choree lai samjhawuna thalyo. Choree bhuney jiddi gurera karai rahee. Makkai family ka aru bayaska sadasya haru ley panee samjhawuna thaley tura choree tusmus
gureena. Choree ko moorkha jiiddi bata aakool bhayera ba makailey jay purey punee
uslai laney needho garyo. Kareeb cha/saat ghunta hiney puchee handee gawun ayo. Parrai bata dandunee baleko ago ma mata ka handee haru basaliyeko dekhiyo.
Ba makailey choree makai lai ek patuk pheri samjhayo, " phool utheko ramro ta awasya huncha nani, sabailey mun parawunchun tura janiyena bhuney dudhera kalo hoincha. "Tyasailey timi aruley phool uthayeko herea busa aunee arko jatra ma timilai punee sungai lyawula", ba makkai ley pheri dohrahyo. Tura jiddi choree dheet bhai rahee. Auntyama subbai makkai family handee bheetra pausey. Paila ba makkai phool uthyo, uchittiyo. Tyaspuchee ama makkai phool utheen, uchittien. Sabai pallai palo seto bhayera uchittina thaley. Sanee makkai bhauney pheendh mai dudhera kalo bunee rahi. Waree - paree ka phool haruley uslai thetna bhunera geejyawuna thaley. Herda herdai ago neebhyo, phool utheka subbai makkai haru a-aphna handee bata beestarrai neeskuna thaley. Sani justai jiddiwaal makkai haru lai ewuta aulaggai bhando ma sareeyo. Tee aba makkai punee rahenun, subbailey thetna bhunera geejyawuna thaley.
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| makai_fan |
Posted
on 10-Sep-02 03:31 PM
.good story to all who understand.
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| deep |
Posted
on 10-Sep-02 03:48 PM
Aaanch....Jira bro le naramro diyo koocho ko daanth le....
Harey....kina yasto gareko? yasari ngyakidini bhanya?
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| Badi |
Posted
on 10-Sep-02 04:25 PM
Rekha's love story if like watching a Hindi Movie, never ends but carries on and on.
Anyway, from her story it is very clear how sexist the guys in Nepal are. First of all, I realized inthe first part of her story that even when she didn't want to tell how she loved or what she had to say, she was forced by a guy named, Anis who she calls Dai. She was forced to stay with Roman and his other friends the same night for so late even when she asked if she could leave because of the fear of her family.
And what's that crap, about Roman getting mad all the time whenever she say Rekha with someother guy, once with her cousing and once with Rupesh? He could have simply asked Rekha later on about those guys instead of making judgements about her as well as the other guys. And come on nepali guys, just because a girl is nice to you, jokes with you, talks to you, doesn't mean that she is in love with you. That was the case with Rupesh. And what bout sending guys from Siphal to Maitidevi to fight? Just because Rupesh found out that Rekha loves Roman and not him? Give me a break. Everyone gets to chose who he/she loves. Didn't Rupesh realise that he was passively forcing Rekha to love him by sending guys to beat up Roman. When will Nepalese learn to be civilized and deal with problems like that without violence? Violence doesn't solve anything. I was tired of the violence (not the maoists/army) but our own normal/ordinary, day to day people reacting on everything with violence.
Anyway, there are a lot to say on those. I even once had started a thread about "Nepalipan.".. Interested.. find it in the long list of threads and read it.
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| rekha |
Posted
on 11-Sep-02 12:09 PM
Smurf
I was not 10 when I met Roman and I'm not 16 or 17 right now.
You don't know about me so why are you judging me???
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| u.d. |
Posted
on 11-Sep-02 07:59 PM
Rekha,
Smurf is guessing your age by your online behavior and writing style. Don't take it offensively. Yespali phool na uthyera ke bhayo ra? Try it next year.
And another love story written by maya1. girl, were you trying to write another "romeo and juliet". sorry, this time the tragedy quite didn't work like it did for shakespeare. By the way, did you read jira's story ...:)
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Posted
on 11-Sep-02 08:17 PM
Rekha,
Thank you for the continuation of the story.
If I were you I would be selective on responding to the messages.
Regards,
Your fan
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| maya1 |
Posted
on 11-Sep-02 11:27 PM
>>And another love story written by maya1. girl, were you trying to write another "romeo and juliet". sorry, this time the tragedy quite didn't work like it did for shakespeare. By the way, did you read jira's story ...:) <<
I wonder where jira's story is in this jumble of threads. can u post the exact URL?
I wasn't trying to make it a romeo juliet love story. story apun apun ka hai....
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| Rekha |
Posted
on 12-Sep-02 12:34 PM
Roman ko Dushman ji,
You asked me how my dad knew about Roman.
Well Roman was a friend of my cousin (Reshma di , Karishma di and Nazma di)
I had known Roman since I was very little. Since he was a friend of my cousins
he use to come by my house time to time. That's how my dad/my family met Roman.
Anyway my dad knew about me and Roman through Anish dai and Aunty (Uma ko aama).
Reshma :-)
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| NK |
Posted
on 12-Sep-02 01:34 PM
Jira, loved your sanee makai ko katha. About Rekha ko katha, I still have not made up mind. She is writing what happend to her. That is all. Is it a good story? Hard to say. Is it really a bad story? If something happened to somebody and she/he wants to say it to the world - hey let her! Since it's a true story (I am taking Rekha's words for it), how can I as a reader say it's a bad story? Again Rekha wants to spill her gut out, and all I have to do is stand here and rove my eyes around, I should feel lucky and feel in some pervese way, lucky!
oh whatever! Just be. just say.
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| bideshi |
Posted
on 12-Sep-02 02:22 PM
hey rekha,
kina lambyaraheko?Complete ur story.
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| jira |
Posted
on 12-Sep-02 03:44 PM
Nk!
I sure do not have any problem reading any story but when it happens to be a real story..hmm. I have to think about it. I would less care about other things as long as it comes from sombody's heart. Don't you love those Roman writings? :-).
Facts
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HOW LONG HAVE YOU BEEN IN THE US?
Rekha Posted on 08-16-02 11:32 PM
I came here when I was 12 years old.
It's has been 6 years since I have been here in USA
Paragraph1
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"bistarai bistarai college skip garera hami dui jana ghunma janthyoun. by this time
we were just holding hands - not in front of people. ani ek din u ra ma matrai thiyoun,
we were just talking nonsense (which was romantic then) and he held me around his arms.
It felt good. He wanted something from me... i didn't ask what it was but i gave him a
soft kiss on his cheeks. he did the same to me. that was my first kiss from a guy on the
cheek. "
Paragraph2
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"ani ekdin estai ghumira bela ma we were holding each other and he just stared at me
for some time. When i was going to say something, he kissed on my lips. it was very
unexpected and i didnt know really what to do...!!! i mean that was the first kiss
on the lips and seriously i didnt know that nepali guys and girls actually kissed
on their lips. it was a short kiss but was enough to make me want more. "
***
Based on the Facts, that must have happened between the age 0-12.
Considering it a true story, I may have some objections regarding the profanity (please refer to above paragraphs). laying it on hard wooden floor, should I consider it a child pornography? ....I do not know...
If it were totally imaginative, I would less care comparing the age of the author and the content presented.
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| shraddha |
Posted
on 12-Sep-02 04:17 PM
Hi Reshma, From my point of view, I think you should quit this and kill Rekha...what I mean is stop posting with the name Rekha/Reshma and start posting anonymously. Most of us here are anonymous and whatever we do here does not affect our personal life outside the virtual sajha life. You have to be very careful when your identity is known here. Look at Paramendra and NK, observe how and what they write as being posters with their real names. Though I don't know you, reading from other threads I see that a handful of people know the real Reshma. And you know, though we're in the US, Nepalipan never goes away. People will start talking about you like 'oomrindei teen taat'
I read in some other thread that you have brothers...what do you think how they'd feel about their sister.It's just how I felt when I read the postings. Anyway, Take care.
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| shraddha |
Posted
on 12-Sep-02 04:19 PM
read 'oomrindei teen paat'
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