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| SimpleGal |
Posted
on 17-Nov-02 12:18 PM
Inspired by the exchange with Anepalikt on "visions of the daughter of polarities" :)
Disclaimer: It shows a sharing in the title of William Blake's "Visions of the Daughters of Albion," except of course, it doesn't seek to align itself, either in content or in style, with that beautiful work!
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She watched with somber eyes,
Drop by drop as they fell,
Little beads of nothing,
Wombs enveloping all within,
That the jagged edges
Grating on them,
Sawed through;
And they bled—yet renewed.
Luscious strands of her hair
Flailed in the wind
Slapped across her face
Pierced through those eyes
Flashing but a glimpse
Of globules—the antecedents
To the brimming, spilling
Emptying, and re-filling
Of the heaves;
Dying—yet perennial.
A patch of flushed cheek
Peeked meekly.
A pang in the beating of the heart
A spark of unexplored sensation;
Silent—yet speaking.
She closed her eyes,
Slowly to remove,
Remnants of but a moment’s rush,
A moment renewed, perennial,
Yet no longer heard
Or felt.
A drop, a strand, a patch,
Lingering—yet misplaced.
Such are the visions of the daughter of polarities.
In peace.
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| SimpleGal |
Posted
on 17-Nov-02 12:20 PM
Sorry, it should read:
Inspired by the exchange with Anepalikt on "visions" and "polarities" :)
In peace.
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| red_herring |
Posted
on 17-Nov-02 07:28 PM
Well, I don't think anybody here understood what your poem's about. Symbolisms are not easy to decipher. But to me (and I know I am wrong), the poem sounded like it's about a woman's menstruation.
She watched with somber eyes,
Drop by drop as they fell,
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And they bled—yet renewed
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Flashing but a glimpse [is she menopausal now?]
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| SimpleGal |
Posted
on 17-Nov-02 07:58 PM
Red_herring,
Your "vision" is intriguing indeed!!
Remember, there is no "one absolute" response to poetry, although my intentions in writing this poem were hardly about female menstruation. I wrote this in a stream of consciousness mode. So, your observation is entirely plausible! :) It's interesting to me, that with your "red" herringness, you perceived "redness" and hence the female menstrual blood! :)
In peace.
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| red_herring |
Posted
on 17-Nov-02 08:04 PM
Personally speaking, I think poems should follow with a brief explanation, so that all can appreciate it. It's not worth it to try and decipher the hidden meanings. It takes time and effort to do that. Didn't mean to offend you.
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| SimpleGal |
Posted
on 17-Nov-02 09:04 PM
Oh no red_herring, you do not offend me in the slightest bit, dear sir. :) Contrarily, I am bemused by your perception! I have never been angry in my life! Irritated, yes, but not angry! :) So, do be assured.
About your suggestion, what is poetry if an explanation (by the poet!!) is provided?? What then of imagination? Of endless possibilities? :) Again, this is a poem specifically about visions. And based on my interaction with Anepalikt and Bhedo ji on "campy" poetry! :)
In peace.
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| lonely |
Posted
on 17-Nov-02 09:23 PM
Simpalgal,
ke ko kasto dami poems lekehko ho, badhai chha hai..pathera danga pare ma...
Hamlai ni sikai denu paryo kabita lekhna lai ..last ma re kya..
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| anepalikt |
Posted
on 18-Nov-02 04:41 AM
Haha!! I am laughing at the exchange about menstrual flow and meopause. Haha.. thats funny.
Thank you SimpleGal for sharing your poem:) Can't say I "understand" either, but that is secondary. I liked the general mood.. very angst filled:) I am not familiar with Blake's poem that you mentioned. Would having read that made this poem clearer for me? I am not sure. But even so..... can't say this comes anywhere close to being campy, a bit cryptic still, but good!
Thank you again.
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