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| SimpleGal |
Posted
on 22-Jan-03 08:19 AM
"Untitled"
Somewhere, in a place I've never travelled
Beyond imagination, but within the reaches
Of a feeling I cannot yet describe
I find you---
Flickering like a lamp in the wintry gusts
Unflinching in your flames
That singe me, consume me.
Parched, torn, and trembling
I stood at a juncture
Facing a vision without a visage--
I closed my eyes to the uncertainty
That glared back at me.
I shrieked and you caught my cry
Held it without a touch, within a sigh
And let it linger in a voice I alone heard
Echoing back to me.
I caught your voice and a song was born
Its melody resounding through time.
I close my mind and open my heart
That welcomes you in gestures
I know you understand.
Is this the beginning of a feeling?
Nameless, faceless, yet feeling.
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"Tonight"
What is this fire that burns?
You care not for the conflagration
Yet a flicker of its flame singes me.....
In peace.
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| czar |
Posted
on 22-Jan-03 09:18 AM
Apassion flowering..beautifully written Simple.
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| forget-me-not |
Posted
on 22-Jan-03 12:03 PM
simple gal..this is very good...keep up this spirit of writing...
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| VillageVoice |
Posted
on 22-Jan-03 07:32 PM
SimpleGal, kabita ramro laagyo :)
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| Poonte |
Posted
on 23-Jan-03 07:31 AM
Wah re wah!
ka ta lukyo bhaneko ta...jhwattai aayera tarsaidiyo ni khatara poem lekhera...want more Henessy with ginger ale? cheers!
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| oys_chill |
Posted
on 23-Jan-03 07:32 AM
ahem ahem!
mero ni bichar haroo pokhdihalum na .....
first one chai khoi....khararara padya ho..kya ho kya ho.......seems like simplegal dizzu lai ni laberia bha jasto cha ;) aaba lines nai tyasto cha..la la..no wonder, scribblings matrai lekhna maun lagne..khana khana chai man nalagne, sochi rahane ho ??? ehehe
aaba tonite chai is ghacchi....malai ni man paryo :)...la yeso purano grudge bhulera bhaye ni ek dui akshar lekhdai garnu hoi??
hajur ko "untitled" fan ;) re kya
oys
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| najar |
Posted
on 23-Jan-03 08:23 AM
Ahem ahem S-gal, kya ho? ;)
Thee's poetic ability ta ke bayan garaai bhayo ra, as always naturally flowing (more so this time :) ) and beautifully crafted.
I agree with Oys ko analysis :) deconstruct garna ra oys the chiller lai kasle jitne?:P
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| Arnico |
Posted
on 23-Jan-03 10:53 AM
Beautiful
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| SITARA |
Posted
on 23-Jan-03 11:23 AM
Nice!
Najar ....
Was a pleasure chatting with you yesterday! :)
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| Rusty |
Posted
on 23-Jan-03 12:22 PM
Sitara Ji
Sajha ...ani feri chat pani:p Double addiction!!!
BTW, I also need to learn how to chat in the room:p
SG, very nice poem :)
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| chipledhunga |
Posted
on 24-Jan-03 09:30 AM
Simplegal, excellent poem. Kasto kasto lakhna jaanyaa hola. Even though your nick suggests simplicity, I see more complexity in you. PhD gardai cha psychology ma, geet gaucha Hindi ma, poem lekhcha English ma, pimple aucha galaa ma..manche chahi complex nai ho. Keep up the great work.
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| chipledhunga |
Posted
on 24-Jan-03 09:32 AM
Simplegal, excellent poem. Kasto kasto lakhna jaanyaa hola. Even though your nick suggests simplicity, I see more complexity in you. PhD gardai cha psychology ma, geet gaucha Hindi ma, poem lekhcha English ma, pimple aucha galaa ma..manche chahi complex nai ho. Keep up the great work.
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| chipledhunga |
Posted
on 24-Jan-03 09:35 AM
sorry hai duplicate post bhaecha :(
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| eyefusion |
Posted
on 24-Jan-03 10:25 AM
Thankyou SimpleGal for such a beautiful poem.
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| premPUjari |
Posted
on 24-Jan-03 10:34 AM
aaaanch!!
How come I didn't see SimpleJyu ko poem? Thought I had perfect 20/20 vison. Es paali ta gayercha check-up garnu paryo. Vision ghatya jasto cha. Chasma laaune Dhoko pura huna laagya jasto cha.
Diminishin' vision
chasmaa laaune reason
Winter ko season
I am butt frozen. (jpt #334)
nice one Simple jyu,
Achel Oys is usually right ni. Ke ho Oys? Bihana uthne baani lagera dimaag atti fresh bha jasto cha ni. I agree with Oys hai. Simple jyu lai loveria bha ho re kyaa ajha laast ma!!!
(aba Oys le maile bhanda pahila posting garyo bhane, ma chai "aijaan aijaan" ie same as above bhanne chu yaar.. hehehe...
Simple jyu aru ni jaawosh!!!!
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